This was a good serial. I thought it was fun, cool, and I enjoyed it. But I wished you(Toni S.) would of had a chapter called Sailor Mars big battle. I also wished you would of included Sailor Pluto and Saturn. I think they should of died in like chapter 8 or 9. I wish Jamie would of been iin the last chapter. I also wished you wouldn't of had the scouts say said. I mean for example "No Darien" said Serena! It should be more like this-----> "No Darien" cried Serena! Do you get what I mean. I think you spelt Rini wrong. I think the correct way to spell Rini is Renie. I wish there was a part in your serial were Sailor Moon and the scouts use "Sailor Planet attack"! I think Serena should of been more obsessed with the fact that Darien was gone for a while...same with Renie. I wish Artemis, Luna, and Dianna would of been in this serial more. I wish there would have been more well its kind of hard to explain. Like this ---> Serena looked into Darien's eyes. She was truely inlove with him. You get what I mean? I think Jamie was coming on kind of strong by telling Mina that he loved her. I think he should of told her that in the last chapter. Anyways I loved this serial. My favorite chapter is the one called Sailor V's big battle LOL!:) I also loved the chapter called Jupiter's battle. I thought you did a great job on this serial. I give this serial a 8 out of 10. An 8 is an A- wich is a great grade for this serial. Oh yeah, Your title The return of Queen Beral is spelt wrong. It should be spelt The return of Queen Beyrl. Anyways write more serial's soon. Hey Toni will u write a book review on my serial Sailor Moon season V1???
Paul K.