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An angel's tears

by Regina S.
copyright 12-07-2003


Age Rating: 10 +

Do your eyes not bleed with salty tears of fire
when dark clouds form to hide the light blue sky?
Do you dare to question your true desire?
For when your smile fades, does not your spirit die?

Come play my child, with these wondrous seasons
for quickly they do come and disappear.
Ignore the worlds heartless sins and treasons,
they should never touch your fragile ear.

Dance with the wind-blown silky petals,
they always seem to soothe your soul somehow.
Soon the wind will stop and they will settle,
but you should not worry about that now.

The world's only hope hides within your eyes,
don't cloud your innocence with your saddened cries.






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        11-03-2004     Charlotte Soffner        

Very touching.


        07-25-2004     Cortney Jaruzel        

This is really pretty. It kinda gives me a vision and feeling on a black and white day, with leaves everywhere. Like in a park. My old park I used to live by. It was.. a quiet.. and great.. feeling. The wind whispered in my ears, while I stood on the slowly moving miricle round thing... and watched the swings move back an forth from the wind. Seeing the cold beautiful lake out of the corner of my eye. I miss the old days.....

P.s. Open chat. It'll work now. =D

        02-05-2004     Alixandria Warren        

again asome work

        01-02-2004     Riley Mackenzie        

how sweet! you better stop writing too many poems cuz i can't keep up with you ;) lol

very nice :)
Riley aka Kaeli

        12-27-2003     Gregory Christiano        

Very well expressed in an eloquent, smooth language. You are truly gifted, and like Moses points out, you are destined to become a poet in high esteem. Highest ratings!

        12-10-2003     Joan Jotz        

Regina,
This poem has a nice dreamy feel. Takes the reader to that place of innocence.
A few suggestions. You have good rhythm, but it's sometimes cluttered.
EX: 3rd stanza, 2nd line. Maybe ..."they somehow seem to soothe your soul."
And the last line-the word your is repetitious.
Maybe ..."don't cloud your innocence with saddened cries."
Also worlds should be "world's"-possessive.

I like the poem, you have a good command of words. Hope you don't mind the suggestions. Like to know what you think.
Keep dreaming!! joan

        12-09-2003     Nancy Pawley        

What a beautiful write, Regina. One that flows from your fingertips straight into my heart.
Nancy

        12-09-2003     Debra Rose        

Incredibly beautiful and touching, Regina. I loved this poem

        12-08-2003     Paul Kangas        

this poem is so beautiful, so perfect!

        12-07-2003     Moses Hochstetler        

Perfect, Regina - a marvelous work of art. I gave you the highest rating - and I'm very stingy in giving those out, but yours is very deserving. You are becoming such a gifted writer. I expect you to become the "poet laureate" at age 20! I would truly encourage you to apply for admission to one of our nations finer writing schools when you finish high school. You have the natural talent.

In highest regards,
Moses



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