11-03-2004
Charlotte Soffner
Very touching.
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07-25-2004
Cortney Jaruzel
This is really pretty. It kinda gives me a vision and feeling on a black and white day, with leaves everywhere. Like in a park. My old park I used to live by. It was.. a quiet.. and great.. feeling. The wind whispered in my ears, while I stood on the slowly moving miricle round thing... and watched the swings move back an forth from the wind. Seeing the cold beautiful lake out of the corner of my eye. I miss the old days.....
P.s. Open chat. It'll work now. =D
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02-05-2004
Alixandria Warren
again asome work
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01-02-2004
Riley Mackenzie
how sweet! you better stop writing too many poems cuz i can't keep up with you ;) lol
very nice :)
Riley aka Kaeli
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12-27-2003
Gregory Christiano
Very well expressed in an eloquent, smooth language. You are truly gifted, and like Moses points out, you are destined to become a poet in high esteem. Highest ratings!
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12-10-2003
Joan Jotz
Regina,
This poem has a nice dreamy feel. Takes the reader to that place of innocence.
A few suggestions. You have good rhythm, but it's sometimes cluttered.
EX: 3rd stanza, 2nd line. Maybe ..."they somehow seem to soothe your soul."
And the last line-the word your is repetitious.
Maybe ..."don't cloud your innocence with saddened cries."
Also worlds should be "world's"-possessive.
I like the poem, you have a good command of words. Hope you don't mind the suggestions. Like to know what you think.
Keep dreaming!! joan
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12-09-2003
Nancy Pawley
What a beautiful write, Regina. One that flows from your fingertips straight into my heart.
Nancy
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12-09-2003
Debra Rose
Incredibly beautiful and touching, Regina. I loved this poem
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12-08-2003
Paul Kangas
this poem is so beautiful, so perfect!
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12-07-2003
Moses Hochstetler
Perfect, Regina - a marvelous work of art. I gave you the highest rating - and I'm very stingy in giving those out, but yours is very deserving. You are becoming such a gifted writer. I expect you to become the "poet laureate" at age 20! I would truly encourage you to apply for admission to one of our nations finer writing schools when you finish high school. You have the natural talent.
In highest regards,
Moses
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