Stars of Heaven--Advise needed
by
Erica S.
(Age: 17)
copyright 12-12-2003
Age Rating: 10 to 127
For those of you who have(or haven't) read my story, Stars of Heaven, I need a little bit of adivse for the next chapter.
It is the twenty-fourth of December, and Star is getting ready to go to the Moon for their annual Christmas party, even though she doesn't celebrate Christmas.
I had started the second chapter on paper earlier, and it ended up going the completely wrong way, dividing Star and her parents between their beliefs. Was that a good thing? I really don't know if I want Star to be seperated from her parents because of her beliefs, because, after all, she has to live with them her whole life(at least until she's sent to earth).
Anyway, please give me your opinion. I am in much need of it!
Thanks!
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Yes, that's why I'm struggling with it...:P
She really has a secluded background, and I think it's developed pretty well over the past few months. I thank you very much for your *advice* ^^.
I had actually started out with Star fighting her parents on it. But, I don't know if it's a good idea or not. LOL, but what you said really helped, ^_^
BTW, thanks for spell-checking.
Well, that's kinda tough, beliefs make things a lot more complicated than they really need to be. Why does Star have to wait to be sent to earth? you can make her get sent right now, or you can make her live with Hotaru. Also, if you want to take Stars side, you can make her make her parents see 'the meaning of christmas'. But if you want to take her parents side, then the story might really get messed up because parents usually try to be...controlling. Star should believe whatever she wants, and if her parents try to take that away from her, it's not exactly gonna end up 'happily ever after' unless she fights them. That or you could wipe out the belief thing, make her parents not care, and make a new ending to the story without that conflict. :) It's your story, you chose. n_n
well, Erica, i haven't read your story, but it sounds great! anyway, about the belief thing...it's up to you! it's your story! i think the belief idea is a good idea!
jenna T.
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