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It's Over
by Cortney Jaruzel (Age: 18)
copyright 01-24-2004


Age Rating: 13 to 127

 
And Thank God It’s Over,
I wanted to breath,
But you captured me.
I wanted to see,
But you blinded me.
I wanted to feel,
But you locked me In tortured,
I wanted to heal,
But I got more..

And I ran away,
I’m finally free today,
As each day used to get colder.
But thank God, It’s over.

Look at the girl,
Chained to the walls,
How much longer,
Before the floor finally falls?

Look at this girl,
Who could she be?
Looking back In the mirror,
Could she be me?

I just wanted to feel,
Just okay,
But now I know,
I can’t be okay.

And Thank God It’s Over,
I wanted to breath,
But you captured me.
I wanted to see,
But you blinded me.
I wanted to feel,
But you locked me In tortured,
I wanted to heal,
But I got more.
And thank God It’s over..

Reminds me of those old days,
Back at the castles,
How people prayed,
They’d be okay.

One thing wrong,
One thing said,
One mess up,
And It messes you head..

But thank God It’s over..
I just wanted to feel,
Just okay,
But now I know,
I can’t be okay.

I wanted to breath,
But you captured me.
I wanted to see,
But you blinded me.
I wanted to feel,
But you locked me In tortured,
I wanted to heal,
But I got more.
And thank God It’s over..


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10-19-2005 Charlotte S.    

Exellent write! I like it alot.
But in the first line where it says "And thank God it's over", you could maybe remove the "And" because it's the beginning of the poem?



02-08-2004 Emily Garwood    

cortney this is an excellent poem!!!!!
(sorry i havent bee on in a while too much happening) hope ur doing okay and this is a good poem with lots of meaning and so strong too well done!!
Emy


02-01-2004 Toni Sweeney    

I am so glad you got this poem to the front where it belongs. I am realy glad you decided to stay at pnp. This is my fav. poem written by you. Keep up the good work.
Toni S.


01-25-2004 Leah Garrison    

excellent message, but it's bogged down in technical errors.
line 2: breathe with an e.
line 7: move tortured to the next line.
stanza 8, line 4: messes with your head.
I know that playing with capital letters can sometimes lend extra emphasis and sometimes is done for an artistic effect, but you do it haphazardly and it just looks messy.
correct and I will recommend joyfully because you have a real vision.

=^.^=


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