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Thankyou everyone!!!I havn' been able to post until i had my dues payed....thankyou so much for the crits!!!!
About how I wrote the poem...i know it doesn't read smooth and I didn't really mean for it to be....~.^The way i wrote it was in thoughts a questions about the person and the other as well.Its harsh life questions that one may keep bottled up in the heart and so I didn't really want it to be smooth going...becuase its not smooth mataril...I'm sure that sounds weird..I don't know if I explained it clearly...or as well as a 12 year old can....-^.^-
I see that you fixed some of your mistakes. the poem does not read smooth. You should always write it so that it reads like someone was talking. Ask yourself if you can see someone saying the lines you write. Good thought, Thanks, Anthony
Wow!! This poem is awesome. My favorite part of the poem is the last two lines. I found one mistake while reading teh poem. In the 4th stanza on the 4th line you need to put a space between handsome and like. Rather then that the poem was great. Keep up the good work.
Toni S.
First stanza, third line "speacil" should be special...
Second stanza, last line "lovly" to lovely...
Third stanza, first line space and insert an I between "dohear"
Fourth stanza, last line "Your" should be you're and space betwwen "handsome,like"
Fifth stanza last line I don't think there should be a question mark at the end of it.. but I could be wrong (happens often ~.^ )
Sixth stanza, third line Ithink a comma would suffice as ending punctuation rather then the question mark...
Anyways, I hope that my school marm mode has been helpful to ya! I really like the direction of this piece, eternal devotion to a seemingly hopeless cause... wonderful job!
~Steffie~
btw- make the proper grammer adjustments and I'd be more than happy to come back and rate again!
Welcome !
