Birth of Desiree'
by
Nancy Pawley
copyright 04-18-2004 Contest Winner
Age Rating: 16 to 127
Picture Credits:
Sipping on the delicious blackberry wine that he offered me
made me smile in blessed relief
The taste was fruity sweet
as it cooled my parched mouth and throat
I exhaled a laugh while a velvety smooth sensation
this first privilege of feeling, a sense of elation
Euphoria surrounded me like a cloak
as the heady intoxication consumed me with bliss
my fantasies were occupied
by having his lips taste of mine with his kiss
When I had my fill, my eyes held a shine
The Count mentioned the superstition;
the Legend behind the wine
“ In English folklore there are correct times for berry picking,
that all good women and men would apply
When Satan himself, was kicked out of Heaven
Shivering, all the children do speak with conviction
Any berries picked after Michaelmas (September 29)
will have the Devil’s spittle on them ”
His grin was shaped in Evil
His fangs glistening in the short-lived light
His voice dripping sarcasm
freezing in its deathly chill
He said, “ My Dear, this wine that you drank
will lead you to temptation, to places dark and dank
The fermented berries were picked after Michaelmas
They were cold with frost, glazed with crystaled ice ”
My thoughts flash red, with pulsing blood now are filled
There’s a pricking at my neck; he claims his marriage stake
His name for me is Desiree’, his heart’s desire
No one left to hear my nightshade cries, burned with fire
T’is the everlasting death of me, cards of Life no longer in the deck
Desiree’s birth this day he makes
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Excellent writing in this piece. Best words -best placement. The story of the devil an Desiree
was indeed entertaining and the temptation is a great parable.
Your words were powerful, structure and rhythm excellent. And BTW did I tell you I liked it.
Unwitting cohort, unwilling bride... extremely passionate, sad, and sureal. Lovely! ... workmanship... though the images turned dark so I am not speaking of the vivid images that will leave a shadow on every thought I think today.
all the wording and how you phrase things is wonderful, and this is an excellent poem, i think it has now become one of my favourites :) keep up the wonderful work and im going to continue reading more
Emy
Nancy,
As the pomegranate was consumed and Hade's took his unwilling bride, so were the berries, flicked with the Devil's disgrace. Amazing job. Very haunting with a beat that really sticks in the mind.
Good poem but you should rate the age a bit diffrently. Rather then your poem was good. When I first saw the picture it freaked me out I kinda shivered that is an awesome picture for the poem. Keep up the good work.
Toni S.
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