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One Day for Paradise
by Delaney Lindley (Age: 18)
copyright 12-19-2004


Age Rating: 13 to 127

 
Ok, I think I'll keep it as it is for now. This is for my friends who committed suicide this year.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~~*~*~*~*~*~*


Laughter...
It comes so easy
In the poisoned and imprisoned mind
Pray you're right
(You know you're wrong)
Dissappear into the night

Leave your bed
Your home,
Your thoughts,
Your wonderfully-unique way...
For just a day in paradise
And hope for Eternity to stay

I knew you'd go for paradise
You'd choose it over me
I had nothing left to give-
And you had no reason
Not to leave

Imagine all the ways
The times you thought you'd die
Wish I could've done something better
So you wouldn't have to cry

Laughing really matters
In the sick and twisted mind
You gave it all for a day in paradise...
To leave it all behind.


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07-21-2004 Emily Garwood    

its a perfect poem written wonderfully and it says so many things and makes you think alot about the way things are and whats important and what you give up if you go
well done
Emy
06-27-2004 Joan Jotz    

Delaney,
This is exremely insightful, and ripe with questions about life and death choices. You draw the reader in immediately with the 1st stanza...show laughter expressed in it's saddest form. You mirror the 1st and last stanzas, using laughter to glimpse into the confused and conflicting mind of someone suicidal...VERY EFFECTIVE!
The reader experiences the hopelesness of the friend left behind.
Excellent writing, full of emotions.

~*~Joan~*~
05-05-2004 Debra Rose    

Actually, I think you left it off perfectly. It has a wonderful beginning, a perfect work up, and the final stanza is the climax and anti-climax all wrapped up into one. The lines "You gave it all up for paradise/To leave it all behind" is amazing.

Now...on a more personal note in "response" to this poem.

This arises questions that need to be asked. At what point will you give up heaven for hell? What will make you sacrifice your soul, your moment in the light and in paradise? For me, I have a few things I would give up heaven for, because I believe in them. But to abandon it all, everything you hold true and dear, and everything you swore to stay with and protect, is giving it up for false paradise. They may have tasted heaven, but you will revel in it. Besides...if you do go to hell, at least they have cable ^.~

LOL! Great job, Delaney!

Forever,
Debra Rose
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