09-29-2010
Leigh Gilholm Fisher
This was interesting, and a very forlorn composition. Though descriptions and back story are always a nice touch, I still found this poem to be well written and expressive.
Keep up the good work!
~Leigh of the Commenting Community
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06-09-2005
Andrew Findlay
This was really well expressed. It's true. In society today, it is often easier not to get involved and just ignore those who are less fortunate. There are people everywhere who suffer like this everyday. Hopefully one day we, as a society, will realize that using tax money to feed the homeless is more important than using it to build weapons.
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02-06-2005
Anthony Lane Stahlhut
I hope you never falter in your quest to help others. Thanks, Anthony
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11-13-2004
Lauren Turner
Makes me think of how lucky I am.....
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09-27-2004
Stefanie Mendoza
Sarah,
You send a very strong message here. We all hear you loud and clear. Take a stand for what you believe in and make a difference. You've got a big heart.
~Steffie~
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09-18-2004
Sammy Anderson
The messege is clear here- if you care for someone who seems like no one, they could grow up to be a big someone.
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09-11-2004
Alixandria Warren
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09-02-2004
Robert Betts
This is a wonderful message. I guess all I can say is that if we each do a little, then a lot can be done.
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09-01-2004
Kaitie Mcquiston
Wow that has apowerful message....nad it is alltoo true..sad really..maybe someday people will care
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09-01-2004
Sarah Barrett
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08-29-2004
Tara Manning
That's strong. I didn't expect that last line I thought the poem was longer. But Delaney is right about saying why we should care.
Great poem anyways!
Tara
xxxx
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08-19-2004
Travis Bauer
this is really good. The repetition brings out what your trying to get across. But I agree with Delaney, you should describe why we should care. that would bring it out more.
Travis B.
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08-11-2004
Mary -BrytEyz- Ball
Wow... this is really good for someone of your age. I like the repetition, but I really like the punch at the end. It drives your point home and makes people think about caring a little more... it could save a life.
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08-09-2004
Sarah Barrett
I should write a story but I am not very good
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08-09-2004
Leah Garrison
wow this is a really intense poem. I reall like the use of spaces and the offhand knifestab at the end. it sounds regretful, hurt, and a little bit angry, and is very good.
=^.^=
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08-08-2004
Paula Tsvayg
Wow. This is a very strong poem. Maybe you should write a story about such issues. This is a very very googd poem, and I think that the poem is very great, and you deserve five praise points
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08-07-2004
Sammy Anderson
This is a really touching poem!made me think of what I could do for other people.
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08-04-2004
Delaney Lindley
I think this is good for someone so young. I just think you should describe more. Tell us why WE should care, why does no one care? What did she do? What's the story? try to be more constructive and add more to make us want to care or feel sympathy. Good work though!
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