05-14-2006
Leigh Gilholm Fisher
This is a very good piece! It's on the short side, but the comparisons and the way you word it is very nice! The only thing that really bothers me is how low this is rated... Anyhow, this is a really meaningful and emotional piece, and I really liked it. It'd of been better if you made it longer, and if you capitalized the work "wait" in the title, but aside from that there's no flaws that I can spot. You also added to it a bit with the fitting picture. This was a great piece, and I hope to see more like it! Keep writing! And since this piece shouldn't be so lowly rated, here's a five. :)
Leigh of the Commenting Crusaders!
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04-14-2006
Euna Park
This is really good. I didn't really think anyone else besides me could smell water. When I ask my friends, they give me a "I didn't hear that, and I don't want to hear it" look. -.- This is really good. No complaints. Perfect five for you.
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01-12-2005
Anthony Lane Stahlhut
Sounds good to me. Thanks, Anthony
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12-01-2004
Jane Lee
Everyone! After reading this story please read my other poems and rate and comment on them! Please give high ratings!
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09-29-2004
Barry Clopton Lanier
good work content Jane....but I suggest you consider what Jane....recommended....think about it.....
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09-12-2004
Mika Lee
I would go to u if I could.. WAHHH
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09-03-2004
Amanda Carroll
That's it! I am so forcing you to STOP MOVING!!! Other than that little outburst of mine, I'd like to state that this is a fairly good poem and to stop *cough*moving*cough* ... alergies...
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