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Roses are Dead

by SamiJo Mcquiston (Age: 26)
copyright 08-31-2004


Age Rating: 7 +
Roses are Dead
Picture Credits: http://www.sbsdefense.com/ Images/bleeding%20heart.jpg


Roses are dead, violets are too
I poisoned them all, the poison was you
I hate you now, but I loved you once
Our love had been years, my hatred but months
How could you do that, she was not me
I knew you werenít blind, didnít you see
I saw you kiss her, it made me feel sick
I tried to fight tears, they came too quick
Then you said you loved her, I thought I would die
You looked up and saw me, I heard your lie
You said it meant nothing, it was just a fling
How could that be nothing, I felt your words sting
I looked in your eyes, they were not true
My anger was fierce; I had no forgiveness for you
Did I know you, or just your lies
Is it you or your lies, maybe itís both I despise
You killed my roses, a poison; yes thatís what I said
Well guess what my love, the roses and violets arenít the only ones dead






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        12-06-2005     Leigh Gilholm Fisher        

So amazing... The pain of heartbreak is a emotion we all feel at least once. And for some of us several times... This flows so well and is full of pain and emotion. When someone's heart is broken f or the first time all you feel if pain. In later breaking after makeshift repairing, you'll feel very mad after the pain passes. I wonder how many poems I read titled "Roses are Red" hated them commented on the saying "keep writing" and gave it a one or two star. Now change the last work and give it a dark, deep, emotional, and painful basis and I'll give it a five. I wonder how many times I've said this... the pic is also perfect. Very good. Very dark.

        06-23-2005     Debra Rose        

Wow...this is AMAZING. You seem to have a natural skill to follow pentameter, but some parts seem to veer off. I think a bit of switching the words would work. But I ADORE the spin off of "Roses are Red". This is breathtaking, Sami. You are an amazing poet, and I happen to be a huge fan of dark poetry. I didn't know many people were...at least who write on sites like these ^.~

        06-23-2005     Lucy Suzume Qian        

LOVE THIS POEM SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^.^ U rock!
Dark poetry roxs*

Sayonara,
Suzume AKA Lucy~

        06-03-2005     Anthony Lane Stahlhut        

I know this feeling! I wrote one called, "My Rath" and I think we were in the same state of mind when we wrote our poems! Thanks, Anthony

        12-14-2004     Andrew Findlay        

This was a really intense poem. I noticed your poems usually seem to be very dark in their themes. Especially this one. A lot of anger, and rightfully so. Cheating on someone is one of the worst crimes I can think of. I hope that you didn't really have to go through this, but from the powerful emotions you expressed through this poem, it kind of makes me think you did.

        09-30-2004     Angela Toshner        

This is really good. Hey at least all the guys at your school arnt all cheaters and players. Good write and I know how you feel from my friends experiances. Good job!!

        09-17-2004     Doug Carlson        

Ouch, I can feel your pain all the way over here. This is full of emotion and anger. Truely a good poem. I could almost see your tears coming from reading your righting. it is really good.

        09-05-2004     Buddy Ales        

Yikes, loads of negative emotion there, eh? Your point was clear to the mind, came right through. Tis a sad poem but tis so amazing! I've never seen anyone write in that form but I'm okay with it, it does seem to cluster a bit. Try and break it up into a few stanzas, that might help with the clustering.
~Keep Writing! and Reading!~
~Buddy~



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