So Alone.
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by
Denise Johnson
(Age: 28)
copyright 09-20-2006
Age Rating: 16 to 127
You do not have to be alone to feel lonely, you can be in a room full of people but hear no sound. Like a ghost no one really sees or hears you and little by little your sprit slowly slips away. You feel frustrated, confused, angry, but then, after a while, all of your emotions start to fade and you are left with a dull pain that will not leave you.
Like a diease the loneliness spreads through your body slowly shutting down each and every system. You try to cry but no tears appear, you try to scream and shout but no words come out. You lose all of your confidence, all of your energy, until finally your body becomes an empty shell where you hide, a prison from which you can not escape. You feel no love, just pain.
Once the loneliness has consumed your whole body and turned your heart into a cold sheet of glass, you can no longer feel anything at all. To feel pain would be better than feeling nothing, as when you feel nothing there is no longer a reason to continue. Tired eyes look out from a tired and lonely heart and thoughts of falling into permanent sleep flow freely though your mind.
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Denise: "So Alone" starts out softly but grows to a pounding crescendo like a piece of music played at the concert hall. It was painful to read of thoughts of giving up. I know being truly alone can bring such emotions, especially in the loss of a friend or loved one. I think you captured it all. Thanks. Dale
A write pulling heart and mind together, a strong voice taking images to rest points, clever both in sound and structure, it is the subject that captures your audience, a mental trigger very much alive, I look for more from your pen. Walt
I can relate to this right at this moment for I have just lost my fiancee early this morning. With him being gone, I feel the same exact way as you have described. However, I know I must carry on. Silently, that is what I am doing now. Beautiful write.
This is a very profound piece -something we all can relate to, I'm sure. I have been alone in the crowd many times and I feel the chill of your poem. Good writing -vivid imagery.
I wish I had discovered you earlier.
How come you're not actively writing now.
We need more pieces like this.
Welcome !
