I don’t want to love you. No, I don’t want to love at all.
I just want you to hold me; shield me from this life.
I don’t want to remember anything, make it all go away.
But please, don’t ask for my love. I cannot give it to you.
Through all my trials, I’ve earned a mountain of character,
And lost my family, friends, lovers, and all of my pride.
I cannot forget them, with my tears they bleed out.
So, I ask you, forget I can’t feel. I beg you, please, just hold me.
I don’t want to be your lover, how could you even ask?
I have no use for your love; I could not bear it again.
Please, don’t ask it of me. It would be better if you didn’t.
So empty your eyes of feeling, and just hold me.
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This is so sad! Strong, dark, passionit, and very deep. Love can be bliss and some times it can be like hell. My EXp in the "hell" part of love a bit too big... Not the point though. I love it and perfect pic. Keep writeing!
Beautiful. Sometimes when you love someone, the only thing they can do can't be said from their mouth but can be felt from the warmth they give you in a hug. The hug itself is amazing and makes you feel whole again and holding sometimes keeps our fears away and sometimes our worst enemy of all: ourselves.
SamiJo,
Your re-write has much more passion, more depth. It's strong, sad, and the reader feels the need of the character for closeness without feelings of love.
Typo in the line "So empty you (your) eyes of feeling..."
Good work on this one, you really opened up!
~*~Joan~*~
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