Too Much To Drink
by
David Pekrul
copyright 01-23-2005
Age Rating: 10 to 127
You think I’ve had too much to drink?
Well, that is your opinion,
'Cause I don’t think that I have even started.
You think that you can run around,
And I won’t even notice,
Then come back home
And pick up where we parted.
Well, sister, I’ve got news for you,
That isn’t how it’s working,
You left this house,
Now you have made your bed.
Go back to him, away from me,
If that is how you want it,
'Cause from now on I’ll think of me instead.
It didn’t have to be this way,
But it was your decision.
I trusted you and look at where it got,
So from now on just stay away,
And leave me to my drinking,
And I’ll decide what’s too much,
And what’s not.
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The insight of both you and your readers is amazing. Kudos!
One hint... you may wish to amend the title as the third word should be spelled "to" not "too".
And do you know how often people judge me by what I've written as if it were ME I was writing about? Sometimes?... yes. Sometimes... no. Sometimes I see someone else's pain and feel it in my own heart. Then I can't get rid of it until I write about it. (Is that called empathy?) :-)
Fiction or not, the poem connected with this reader. I actually felt just this way, many times. You capture, nicely, the desperate struggle one can feel when one feels that his autonomy and existence are at stake. The issue posed by the poem, in my view, is not whether the feeling expressed is healthy or not, but rather that you captured the essence of that feeling and conveyed it well. I like the way you also used very colloquial language; even augumentative in tone.
Good poem.
This being a work of ficton I respect the way that you are able to place yourself in the shoes of others to show what desperation feels and sounds like... Thank you anyway!
I agree with SamiJo. It is an awesome piece but if you are truly "Thinking of me instead" then you should think of your health first and foremost...Your best revenge is overcoming what your dealt. Thank you, Sarah
I would like to publicly thank SamiJo for her caring and kind spirit, however, the fact of the matter is that this is simply a work of fiction. I have been married to a very caring and beautiful woman for 33 years now. The character in this story is not intended to represent any person that I know or have known.
I know it's your business and all, but drinking your problems away doesn't really help. It's sad but, I would know. Everything will be there when you get up in the morning. I hope things get better. This is an awesome piece.
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