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Lost Love ( Sonnet )

by Anthony Lane Stahlhut (Age: 52)
copyright 04-10-2005
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Age Rating: 7 +

I once wrote a poem for my girlfriend
with a message that I need her to know.
Did not want our love to come to an end
and what would I do if she were to go.
I studied words to make sure they were right
I wanted her to know it was for real.
How my heart would pound when she came in sight
thought she had to know the way that I feel
I wanted for her to stay there with me
thought life could not be the same for us two.
I called on the phone to give her my plea
while hoping that my meaning would come through.
The phone kept on ringing like a sad song
then I realized she was already gone!






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        04-02-2013     marvinthepoet        

It's so hard to break up with somebody. I remember breaking up with my first love. Oh gosh it broke my heart! I thought I was dying the death of a thousand cuts or something! Lord it hurt!

Good poem!

        01-10-2008     Cassie Sweeney        

Aww this was really sweet! I'm not quite sure what a sonnet is but as a poem I love it! The flows great I really loved it. Nice work!
Just a fellow writer,
~Cassie JSG

        12-22-2005     Mona Boscu        

First I'd like to thank you for the lovely comment about my poem. Then, of course, I want to say I loved your poem.I have a soft spot for sad poems(songs &others). It's very fluent and an enjoyable read...and very sad indeed. Awesome!

        06-20-2005     SamiJo Mcquiston        

Oh, that was so sad.
But another traditionally beautiful sonnet.
Your work is truely lovely.
Keep up the good work.
SamiJo

        05-24-2005     Kristy Ahn        

It really would have been better if you were a little quick. Anyways, have you ever came in contact with this person again?

        05-10-2005     Kimberly Angelone        

poor baby! we all go through this. very well said.

        04-11-2005     Christopher Carlson        

Good Read!

        04-11-2005     Tori Lang        

The words in which you express this poem in resembles the way love can make us feel, like we have to try so hard to impress when in the end being yourself should be all that matters,
I was saddened to learn that you lost her but am sure you will find your true love one day.


        04-11-2005     Mary -BrytEyz- Ball        

Awww... reminds me of highschool times. And sometimes... the time just isn't right. How glad I am for all those heartaches in my past. For one, they led me to my final and ultimate happiness with my husband. And secondly, they helped me appreciate him all the more when he did finally come along. :-)

        04-11-2005     David Pekrul        

What can I say? It is gut-wrenching when someone we care so much for walks away from us. If this is a true story, just be patient, and if she is to be with you, she will return.
One small critique about the poem style: You have rhymed every second line, which is nice, but having said that, you should have an even number of lines to finish the rhyming style. The last two lines break that rhyming style by rhyming with each other.

Best regards,
David Pekrul



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