What Comes With Death?
by
Mary -BrytEyz- Ball
(Age: 38)
copyright 05-06-2005
Age Rating: 4 to 127
I know not if I'll knock on Heaven's door
Or come back to roam the earth some more
Have I been good enough for resurrection?
Have I offered near enough supplication?
I don't know what happens at death, I swear
I've never done that, I've never been there
But I do know that I know how to live
I know how to love and how to forgive
And since dying isn't some form of ancient art
I guess I won't practice how I am to part
I'll not worry about what happened before I came here
And what happens after, I guess I'll not fear
I can't do anything more than I did do
Raising my children, and loving them too
I'll just know I did all I could - my best!
And I'll let God take care of the rest. :-)
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In response to Brian Dickenson's "Death"
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Where we were and where we're going has been the eternal question man has ever asked himself. This poem's does not attempt to answer such questions, instead, it cleverly puts a different spin on the situation and teaches us that it is not where we were or where we're going that it's important, but what we do while we're here, in this transitory stage that is life. Excellent piece!
Good write. You remind me of the leader who, when he was poisoned, once said, when he was asked about the assasination attempt on him and whether he would continue furthering his cause, that dying isn't very original, but living YOUR life as it should be lived and as God intended is what's challenging. Can we all take the challenge?
Walter, Your words are always encouraging, always inspiring, and always from the heart. I appreciate the immensely. You also seem to be one that reads between the lines and can see behind the scenes. Thank you as well for taking the time and going through the added trouble of not only reading the surface of a work, but dissecting it in search of deeper meaning.
It is the voice that grabs the mind and brings it to a place where the words form into visions and images lived and understood. As I work through your works I find heart and soul played perfectly in both voice and image. This is a well crafted and written poem expressing a poet's heart...Walt
Oh by the way I am back from my honeymoon and should have something up soon, but back to the point...
I really like your rythm once again.
I have been doing a study over the last few weeks about what it takes to get into heaven. I am certian that good deeds, helping the poor on Thanksgiving and Christmas, or being good person will buy your way into heaven.
I will post more about this very soon so that i can fully explain what I am talking about. But I am convinced that there is only one way into heaven and only one way to assure what happens after death.
Great Write!
Oh and if you could e-mail those links to which poems I was supposed to read I will read them, but I accidently deleted that e-mail.
Yay! *Happy dance around the room* Thank you VERY much for your comments. And we must have been writing comments at the same time because when I clicked OK why... Poof!... there was your comment that was not there just two minutes before. Thank you, as always, for reading, rating, and commenting. It really means a lot to me.
And Anthony... I couldn't agree more! You are very correct. :-) I think it's really neat we were all on the site at the same time commenting all at once on the same poem. :-) I read David's comment and replied. By the time I was done replying and clicked OK...there were comments from both you and Brian. What a great family we are, eh? :-)
Thanks David! I'll think about the "did do" thing. Anyone else have a comment about that? I'd love to hear it. :-)
As for salvation, I agree that Jesus died for us and we all have the opportunity to take advantage of that gift. However, believing in Jesus is not enough. Satan believes that Jesus is God's son and came here to die for the sins of humankind... however he won't be on the receiving end of that sacrifrice.
Also, there are passages that say people will come to Jesus in the end and say "Didn't we prophesy in your name?" Didn't we do this and didn't we do that? And still, it was not good enough for Jesus will say, "Get away from me for I do not know you!" We must EXCERCISE our faith, for faith without works is dead.
I have the faith, I've attempted to excercise it. And in the end, I know my sins and where I've fallen short. I can only hope my repenance was enough, that I tried hard enough. I don't believe in once saved always saved. Judas Iscariot was ONCE "saved"...but he committed unforgivable sin(s) and will not be partaking of Christ's gift. He felt bad afterward... so bad he committed suicide. But that was not enough. See what I mean?
Anyway... I just hope the good I've done is enough, and the bad I've done... I'm sorry enough. :-) I hope this all makes sense.
Death is kind of final and I'm not ready to even entertain a thought about mine for some time(I hope!!) This is a good response to Brian's poem. We will go from here where God sends us or maybe where the devil entices us to go. Asking for salvation is a start, but you have to walk the walk, not just talk the talk! Thanks, Anthony
I liked this very much, thank you for the mention, and of course all the welcome comments on my offerings.
Davids point about 'did do'. Over here I have heard people say 'I did do'. as in something they have done.
However, we do not all speak the 'Queens English'. In fact there are some local dialects that I need a translater for....lol.
I imagine it's one of those either or situations. I can see why you did it, for the rhyming, maybe this comes under the heading of 'poetic license'.
Keep writing, Brian
Yes, there are many unanswered questions about death. I guess we just have to wait to get them answered, although I do believe we can know if we will be 'knocking of Heaven's door'; It is called Salvation, and comes through the sacrifice of Jesus Christ.
Once small critique:
"I can't do anything more than I did do"
I don't think "did do" is proper English, or at least it seems rather awkward. I don't know, maybe it is just me. Perhaps Brian Dickenson can make comment on that. He's the guy from the Mother Country. It's his language, we're just trying to use it. lol
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