Rekindled Purpose
by
Jack Curson
(Age: 32)
copyright 06-28-2005
Age Rating: 10 to 127
Today a sense of purpose jumps to the forefront of a beckoning heart rekindled.
God is calling!
Realizing my failure,
A reluctance to strive fervently.
I seek the freely flowing love of a most gracious Father.
Admitting to this reality my failures involve the grand scale audience of me, myself and I.
What is it about selfishness that stymies my heart?
This pit of blackness is a detriment to my soul.
Without You I know this world will devour itself.
Our sole strength lies within You.
Weeping, I beckon for the day Your arms enfold me.
But isn't this just hypocritically selfish?
To my demise, self's battle rages on within my shallow body, Destined to lie dying upon the soil of heaven,
While our Lord stands in triumph above me.
So I will wait with a Patient Endurance,
A Hope in many ways carrying me,
Feeding a Faith that seeds the Love blooming within the depths of my soul.
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very good but a typo i think -did you mean to say "and" reluctant? just checking. Those that love their live will lose it, those that hate their life will keep it, remember?
Aha! Now we're talking! This is just plain beautiful! The flow is uninterrupted from start to finish. Your chosen words melt together bringing the reader right into the poem. The imagery is full of hope and wisdom from the Lord and the concept is intricate and intelligent. I love this poem!
Jack, the main idea of this poem is a good one. You have many beautiful expressions of love and praises directed at God. However, there are a few things that must be pointed out concerning this poem: You continuously capitalize words that need not be capitalized. "failures involves," should be, failures involve. "But isn't just hypocritically selfish?" What isn't hypocritically selfish? This is not a complete thought or question. "To my demise, self's battle rages on within my shallow hull of a body," In this sentence, you have the words, "shallow, hull and body," these words do not go well in this sentence. You must rearrange these words, in order to reflect the thought better. The word, "Destine, should be destined." and the word, "dieing" which is to change the color of something, should be "dying." "Feeding a Faith seeds the Love..." the act of feeding and seeding or seeds do not go well together. This poem can be great if you revise it. Stick to the main idea, just take your time reading it and sounding it out.
Faith can be a strong force, but it can also be week and frail. The human condition invokes imperfection. God understands this and gave us a savior to lead us and to give us redemption of our sins. Choice is ours, believe and have eternal life,choose not to believe and take what you can get! This is a strong piece and could get a lot of discussion. Thanks, Anthony
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