Ode to the Mindless
by
SamiJo Mcquiston
(Age: 20)
copyright 07-16-2005
Age Rating: 10 to 127
Picture Credits: www
Staring at the TV, staring blankly again.
This is the beginning to a story, the beginning or the end.
There is nothing lost or found in memories not there,
Your life seems so meaningless just sitting in that chair.
You’ve found a bunch of tied up non-sense, and released it to be free,
To cast a stone of chaos, and force it on me.
Life beyond this mess is cold, and harsh, and true.
It’s a reality to face, I’m just glad I’m not you,
Lost in a blizzard of snow white static,
Moving as a pawn, so precise and automatic.
You have no soul, it’s all been sucked up in this lie,
I said to you hello, but it’s much easier to say goodbye.
The music box melody plays hauntingly in my ears,
You used to love that song, but now you scream in fear.
And sit placidly in front of your TV, with cold and empty eyes,
Watching a world that destroyed you, and laughed at your demise.
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I like the poem. I like your Dark poems better. Thats my opion though. I think it is confusing in the start. Like the subject is unclear. This might be because I am only 11 though.I can relate some times. But, most of the time I am just to busy! Well keep writeing!
One can become not only mindless but emotionally numb by constantly sitting in front of the TV. Sometimes our computers can be just as bad (except for P-n-P, that is)
This poem says it all.
Ay, ay, ay!!!! I'm kinda speechless! Totally, totally outstanding! So much imagery, truth, flow and advice. The message comes right at you and explodes in your face! This poem left me shaking my head! Kudos, SamiJo!!!!
ciaos--is that supposed to be chaos? Or is that a word that I don't know yet? o.o I wish I still had a large vocabulary :)
This poem is haunting, and something that I do agree with. People need to get up off the couch and think for themselves. (Even though I'm a bit of a hypocrite...I love cartoons like Teen Titans; Ed, Edd, and Eddy; and Billy and Mandy; and also shows like Law and Order, and all those true crime shows and can't get enough ^_^ Still...I work in a library, so I read most of the time).
Anyways...I have no idea where I was going with this comment. Wonderful work, Sami. But now I'm angry. You, Anthony, David, Brian, and everyone else need to stop writing so well!!! I'm losing all my points >.<
Very powerful and meaningful poem, SamiJo. I love it. Just like to point out that "Starring", which was used twice in the first line, should be "Staring". Great work.
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