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The Last Star
by Sam Hackel-Butt (Age: 19)
copyright 07-21-2005


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The Last Star

I close my eyes while sitting here in front of the computer, and think back to yesterday morning. Five in the morning. Watching a movie, despite not sleeping at all that night. I was waiting for something. Something special.

The last star. Of the night, twinkling, twirling, elegantly amidst the pale purple clouds of morn. The sun hadn’t yet arrived, but there was enough light to see the dimensions of the fleeting, flurry of clouds racing to the horizon, afraid of being stripped of their dimensional colors and shapes as light grew ever brighter.

I stood outside on the balcony, in the back of my house. Hot and muggy, inside. Cool and refreshing as I gazed up and up, into the peering eyes of the unknown spirits, closing the windows to Heaven, one by one, stars disappeared. Until one was left. Twinkling, twirling, elegantly amidst her dying companions as they left the gazing to a God of the day.

With every gust of wind, the clouds pushed effortlessly towards the remaining star, threatening to engulf her, and take her away into morning. Kidnapped, as she did her best to stray away, push the cloaked, grasping hand away from her twinkling, twirling elegance, trying to capture the beauty of the planet before light robs him of his essence in the seductive dark.

Captured, nothing else to do. The pale purple and blue appeared like watercolor on a canvas, spraying and dripping, fresh alluring colors to tantalize the eyes and pull new victims to gaze upon the dieing star, in all her splendor as she’s forced to abandon her post, seized by force, and held captive until light dies, and she could rejoin, being the first star out to gaze upon the loving face of the earth once more.




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07-10-2006 Tammy Frascona    

I have to say that is is a brilliant piece of art. Not just the poem but the subject. I could almost feel how the star felt. I could imagine the whole vision and would have never thought of any thing so beautiful before now! It's a good one. I also liked your style in here too. Keep up the writing girl, your a shining star!


07-28-2005 Leigh G.    

One of the top 10 poems on the plant! This is so great beond words! I LOVE it Sam! % stars are not enough. It is one of the best you have done if not the best! I Love it because it is not a topic that verry many people can do. It is so great. 9 Stars!


07-26-2005 SamiJo Mcquiston    

Man, this is like your best work ever. I lost for words to praise you with. It's just fantastic. Keep up the awesome work.

SamiJo


07-23-2005 Jean George    

This has got to be one of the most original, not to mention beautiful, descriptions of a sunrise that I have ever read. You description of the dawning of a new day is absolutely gorgeous in your phrasing, your style and your imagery and metaphor....poems trying to describe sunrises are multiple, yours is singular in every way.


07-23-2005 Anthony Lane Stahlhut    

I think this is a wonderfully written bit of prose. It flows very well and paints a picture for the mind that is awesome. Your descriptions here are great and I was very pleased after reading this. Great Job, Anthony


07-22-2005 Jenna T.    

Wow. The images in this piece are awesome. Very good, keep it up! ^_^

Jenna T.


07-21-2005 Roger Crique    

Your expressions and words used to describe the vastness and beauty of the universe are truly remarkable. You must be an aspiring astronomer! Words are action and because of your words, I was able to see the colors of a suffocating star. By the way, in one of your sentences you probably meant, "dying," not dieing. And I would capitalize the word, "god," since you are talking about his creations! I give you a five for imagery, a five for fluidity and a five for structure, which in my book add to a five, not fifteen.


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