Memories of You
by
SamiJo Mcquiston
(Age: 20)
copyright 08-04-2005
Age Rating: 7 to 127
Picture Credits: www
The touch of a hand, the glimpse of a face
A strangers smile, a friendly embrace
A soft cooing voice, a whisper in the air
A song on the radio, a strand of blonde hair
No matter the place, I’m reminded of you
A breeze in the night, a cricket in the grass
Rays of warm sunlight, a splinter of glass
An old movie in black and white, a drop of rain
Utter feelings of joy, stabs of unbearable pain
No matter how I try, I’m reminded of you
In sleepy night, in the heat of the day
When I think I’m found, when I’ve lost my way
In the spring, and when the leaves fall
Every time I take a walk, every time I crawl
No matter when, I’m reminded of you
Reminded of my tears, and how we said goodbye
Of the way we used to laugh, of the way you lied
Oh, these hateful memories, how I’ve been played
How you scared me and left me so enraged
And most of all, how in all this pain……….
I am still reminded of you
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Good message on what "love" can do to your heart when you are betrayed. Excellent! I agree with Delaney though the word "played" seems to take something away.
I love this poem, the feelings I can definitley relate to. But the only thing that took away from it in my oppinion was the fact in the last stanza you used the term "played". It just made me think of You Got Served for some reason. I hated that movie...
I really like the formation of imagery and the rhythmic flow in which this piece flows. I like the way you set up the reader to believe that everything is fine and that you're just reminiscing of how beautiful and wonderful your love is, until the end. This is where you end with a bang and really let the reader know how devastated you feel. Very nicely done indeed!
That is a wonderful poem I know what it's like to lose someone you really love. I've been through the pain of losing in a relationship, take with stride & you'll find someone new & be happier then before. Good Luck!
It's hard to let go of someone you love who you, for one reason or another, you can't be with anymore. Sad endings only bring new, happier beginnings. Good luck!
I think you have experienced something like this before, and you are writing this poem out of that. You needed to express your feeling in some way that would soothe the hurt. This is really good. A word of advice on both the poem and your life. The poem: You have really good rythmic flow, but I think you can add one more verse of 'who' as in people who remind you of her, everyone you know. Your life: Everybody's life is going to shatter at one point. It's our desision if we're going to pick up the pieces, and start all over again, or just let your life be destroyed.
Really good poem! But, I like your Dark work better. I know cat love not people love. But the cat I knew died and I was crying my eyes out. Good luck with finding someone you love the most!
Love is hard to forget. You really liked this person until the breakup and now you wish for the past. No clicking your heals together and going back, real life doesn't give lots of second chances. You are able to find new beginnings though and I believe that there will be one for you soon! Good luck and good poem. Thanks, Anthony
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