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 02-27-2007 Haley R.
I like this poem a lot! I like how you compare I'm guessing an old relationship to eyeliner. It's an original metaphor and it makes a lot of sense! I also like how you kept the lines short and simple. It added a nice touch =].
I like the end of your poem too. It sums up the whole poem nicely. Also I love when people put the title of the poem as the last line!!
Great job! I can't wait to read more poetry by you! They're so original!! =]
-Haley R.
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09-24-2005 Debra Rose
Leah,
This is a beauitful work, filled with sadness, but it did make me laugh a bit.
A while ago, I really liked this person. Got myself all made up with the resolve to approach them. I walked over to them, said hi...they stared at me like I was a clown, and I wound up losing face and pretended like I wasn't talking to them. I went home, washed my face, and couldn't get that eyeliner off, and wound up getting all angry and stuff. LOL! I've never made the connection though!
This is a beautiful work. Sad, gorgeous, and all at once, a bit ironic. Filled with a wistful tone and a magnificent story. Great job.
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09-11-2005 Delaney Lindley
Sometimes that's all love is. Depression, dissappointment and you get short on make up remover very quickly.
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08-09-2005 Leah Garrison
Samantha - re. other stories in poems - I know they come up, and I think it's cool. I was pointing out that sometimes they're so different it's funny. also to reassure whoever may be worrying that no, I don't go through guys like some people do hair colors :)
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08-08-2005 Sam Hackel-Butt
Hi Leah. Left over eye liner can be annoying! Try Baby oil :) But sometimes, Leah, people find stories hidden inside poetry that may not necessarily reflect upon the author. All poetry is up for interpretation, just like the bible. But enough about that! On to the poem! It flows very well, and the way it's broken up is perfect. I really like the poems that don't have rules, and are free to whatever. Well done.
Sam
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08-05-2005 Leah Garrison
here's a question - if my poems are about my life and my experiences... why do people come up with interpretations of my poems that are so much more depressing than my life?? it makes me giggle.
no, the story behind this poem is very simple. (I'm not picking on you, dearest Anthony, you just happened to be here.)
the guy is tony and I am me. we haven't seen each other for a pretty long time and our phone conversations were getting pretty despondent. book night was last night and we were so happy because we'd get to see each other again. I don't use eyeliner very much, but I used a scant bit that night. well it turns out that amid the scuffle, we just bumped into each other and that was it - kinda disappointing... anyway, later that night my eyeliner was being a bugger about coming off, hence the poem.
I guess this is really just to point out that I'm not being constantly dumped by guys like my poems sometimes seem like!
(and I'm only seventeen, I don't have lovers...)
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08-05-2005 David Pekrul
This is really good. Nice flow, just rolls along and easy to read. Keeps one interested to the very end. I like the way you constantly repeat the line "leftover eyeliner".
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08-04-2005 Anthony Lane Stahlhut
Its funny sometimes what we choose to remember people by. For you this time it is leftover eyeliner. Now every time you use the eye liner he will come to mind. Time will fade the pain and a new lover will make it disappear all together. Anthony
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