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For sure life is a progression of steps and the first ones are usually the most important.
And who can tell where they lead? You simply have faith and take another.
I like the title and the idea, though I think you do what I often do, which is to preach a little (I don't mean you do this pridefully or intentionally) or even simply "give away" the "message" of the poem at the end. The worst one can do, is to sound like one is preaching or educating the audience about life, death, etc. (I fall into doing this all the time.)It comes off as if the writer is smarter than the reader. The content and form should be presented fairly objectively, allowing the reader to "figure it out" and have an authentic personal experience. In this poem, the reader should not have to be asked what to feel or think about. The question you pose should be sensed by the reader from the object of the piece, itself. (Though posing a question in any poem obviously can be effective, depending on its purpose and whether it contributes to the overall effect of the piece).
Also, I think the sing-song quality of the first stanza was incongruent with the rest of the piece,
leaving me inconsistent in terms of what I should feel at the end.
Anyway, if I say more, than I'll be preaching! But-- as Bob says-- we are here to give constructive criticism so we can be better writers, rather than patting our egos and earning stars.
P.S. You are an excellent writer.
Yes, life is just a progression of steps. Whenever my kids wanted to accomplish something and thought the task was too big, I would always tell them, "Baby steps, just take baby steps". A lot of baby steps eventually equates to one large leap.
Good write.
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