 06-05-2007 Megan C.
Amazing poem. It's nice how you made it in first person, because that helped with the poem's effect. Also, the picture helped me understand the poem more, even though I know a lot about Sailor Saturn. I haven't seen many poems featuring Saturn, so this was a bit of a treat. Good work!
Megan C.
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03-07-2007 Bunny Franz
All the poetry written about Hotaru is so depressing. *laighs* I guess it's appropriate. I love the feel of this one especially the similie between life and a book.
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12-18-2006 Denise Fairgrieve
Good poem. Someone mentioned how it doesn't seem to flow as well in some parts, and I find that a bit true also. But it does convey what she is feeling deep down.
Keep up the good work.
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07-22-2006 Elisabeth H.
Perfection!!
I really like Sailor Saturn and I can relate to her a lot because sometimes I think that many people that know me don't like or understand me but they don't know the real me...
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01-26-2006 Tabitha Beaudin
yeah not only a good poem about saturn but it has a picture of mistress 9.. yipee..
anyways liked the poem...it portrayed Hotaue's (sp?) feelings perfectly and summed up what she is...aren't sm poems that best lol...
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11-20-2005 Mehrina B.
I agree with Euna P. This rules! Saturn and Pluto are my favorite. Write one about Pluto,and when you do, please tell me?
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10-13-2005 Euna P.
Oh wow!!! This rules!!!
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10-06-2005 Regina Pate
very good job. I love that picture. I don't watch sailor moon I don't even know what time it comes on anymore. I use to watch it all the time. Maybe I will start again. This sure does make me want to. Thank you
Gina
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10-04-2005 Mary -BrytEyz- Ball
Hmm... my research shows that fore means "before or ahead of" and is Scottish in origin. "Fore" is Scottish for "ahead". So "Fore!" was really a way of saying: "Look out all ye ahead of me!" Thus, that's why they shout "fore" at golf.
"For" meaning "because" I believe should be spelled "for" - without the "e".
Of course, if I don't know what I'm talking about... excuse me. And if it is in fact Old English and should be spelled just that way, then I agree with the others that the entire (or at least more of the) poem should also be written in Old English for a sense of uniformity.
Anyway, I loved the picture and thank you for sharing your thoughts. :-)
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10-02-2005 Mary S.
LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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10-01-2005 Kat Voletto
Very nice. The rhythm was a bit here and there, and there wasn't enough flowing language other than that to constitute the use of fore with the 'e'. Very nice besides... glad to see I'm not the only one giving the Outer Senshi attention. ^_^ Keep it up.
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09-30-2005 Katie Langolf
not in the sense that i'm using it in no. the narrative voice in the poem is supposed to be wise beyond its years. Thats why i put 'fore'. I was also going more toward the meaning of the word as it relates to the subject matter of the poem. 'Fore' to me flows a lot better with the poem than 'because' does in the places i put them.
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09-29-2005 James Shammas
Good poem with a nice message. I agree with Roger. There is a danger of using words in a style out of their usual context. Isolated, it it may look a little pretentious. Otherwise, I liked it.
Jim
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09-28-2005 Roger Crique
In order for the word, "Fore," to be effective, other comparable words should be employed. Fore is Old English and if you're going to use it for flavor, you must use other words that are similar to it, in order for the effect to work. Comprende?
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09-26-2005 Victoria Fulp
I really like this poem, it truly shows the sadness that Saturn carries and how everybody judges her. It also explains that everybody is an open book and can be judged from time to time. But if we let it bother us then we are truly subject to our own pain from our selves and not by others.
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09-25-2005 Katie Langolf
the 'fore' is supposed to be spelled that way. I'm using the old english form of the word which basically means 'because'. It a fancy way of wording it, and it flows with the poem.
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09-25-2005 Jenna T.
Yay! A poem about Sailor Saturn! She's one of my favorites. Gotta love her; so mysterious...
Anyway this is an awesome poem. You described Hotaru-chan really well. Just one thing, in the third stanza:
"I do not fear death
fore all must die,"
I think "fore" should be "for"...But I don't kno how you wanted to phrase that...Anyway great work!
Jenna T.
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09-25-2005 Charlotte S.
Love it.
If the pic wasn't there, I wouldn't know that this is about Sailor Saturn (right?)
I like the way youve put it together.
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