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Goodbye

by Leigh Gilholm Fisher
copyright 10-14-2005
Contest Winner


Age Rating: 7 +

I know you're gone
And that I'll never see you again
But I know that you will be happier there
Where?
I don't know
But you are now free
I can't hold you back forever
You can now spread your wings and fly over the world
Free of earthly limitations
Able to go any were
Any time
You will be free
Truly free
Holding you back is wrong
And I know that
As long as you don't forget me I'll be happy
And I will never forget you
Never
Ever
I know you will be happy and that I need to let go
It hurts now
But I know I'll feel better
I won't forget
But I won't cry forever
The pain will fade away
As long as I know you remember our short time together
And that your happy
And Free
I'll cry later
When I know your not watching
Because right now I'll smile and wave as you disappear into the sunset and say,
Goodbye






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        11-18-2007     Cassie Sweeney        

I really like this one, and I can relate to it because one of my family's friends, the nicest guy you would ever meet just died and I'm still trying to get over it. This is exactly how I feel about him. If you read my poem "Till The Day We Meet" It talks about how I wont say goodbye because I don't think it is. If you do read it, it'll probably be confusing because I didn't really write it as a thing for other people, it was a poem to him but you still might understand it mostly. But this is a great poem! Keep up the great work!
~Cassie~
p.s.Sorry it took so long for me to comment back, I was at a singing lesson and forgot to log off. :o oops! ha ha

        05-16-2006     Regina Pate        

Very respectful, and I must say handled better than most, it's almost as if your in shock, or something, or maybe you just expected it, because it's happend before. I can't tell, I just know, that you are wise beyond your years and have a very old, and very wise soul, if everyone could be so calm, cool, and collected, when their heart has just been stomped on, their wouldn't be so much hate, and anger, and ripped apart lives, this is a very encouraging poem, something I needed to hear, thank you for sharing, great write, good job, thanks again,

Regina Pate

        04-11-2006     Richard Reed Jr        

This one almost made me cry. It has the magnetic power of pulling the reader into the poem and making he, or she feel what you are feeling.
Technically another well-structured, smooth reading poem by one of the best at PnP.

Good work Leigh-chan,

Rich

        04-06-2006     Jessica Lin        

LOVE IT! I makes me this of the deep love between Usagi and Maramou. When the had to be seperated or the world would perish!
Bravo! Bravo!

        12-06-2005     Mehrina Butt        

Beautiful poem Leigh. I wholeheartedly agree with Haley that this deserves to win a contest. The sentences flow so smoothly that it seems they rhyme in an unexplicable way. There were some grammar and spelling mistakes, like when you attempted to say anywhere, you said any were. And a couple of others, but this really shows signs that you proofread it as much as you could! Good job, Leigh! I love this poem. It's so expressive of the despair and the mixture between hysteria and deep calmness and peace. Bravo!

- Don't cry because it is over, smile because it happened. Your Friend, Mehrina

        12-02-2005     Haley Robinson        

Oh! Really Pretty! I love how you did Free Verse! It's so pretty! I love it alot! Awsome! You definately deserved winning a contest with this one!!!

The One And Only,
~$*HALEY*$~

        10-21-2005     Mika Lee        

WOW! I love this poem!!! Its soo sad for some reason to me, some what happy!

        10-15-2005     Sam Hackel-Butt        

OH LORD LEIGH! This is absolutely perfect! No spelling errors, it flows so fluidly, and WOW! I see you're starting to increase your vocabulary! I'm never once seen you use the word 'limitations' and you spelled it correctly, too! My only bit of advice: your should be you're. You're is you are. Your is like, possessive. It's your hat.

You're on a roll! You've gotten so much better at writing poems! And you told me you couldn't write poems all those months ago :p If you hadn't tried, you'd never have produced something so beautiful, and something that many feel when someone they love does leave.

        10-15-2005     Anthony Lane Stahlhut        

I like this! This flows very well and the story is so easy to relate to. Sad story, but you did a good job telling it! Anthony



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