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03-12-2006
Frederick Van Kirk
To hell with pieces of eight and gold doubloons! This poem is worthy of pieces of nine, and fresh fruit. Point of fact, I am almost jealous, would that I had thought of such a wonderful theme. I must look for another puddle. I have read almost all of your works I think this is the best so far.
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01-23-2006
Lisa Anderson
I feel that way too. This is a really great metaphor becuase it signifies that everyone around us influences us.
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01-13-2006
Leigh Gilholm Fisher
The sadness and darkness of being lost and afraid. Feeling tattered and lifeless happens when one is in a deep depression, and feels as if they can't escape. The metaphors are also very fitting to the emotions being expressed in this poem. Being sewn together by scraps of many materials is a very good and original way to express all of these sad and painful emotions. I really like the way you write. I do have a few objections though. The layout is a bit random and it's better to start a new line for each verse. Also punctuation isn't necessary in most poems. But that just one opinion of a critic. Kinda reminds me of "About Me" By Utadu Hikaru. Good work, the root of the emotions in this poem are deep.
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12-15-2005
Richard Reed Jr
This poem is Aces and Queens-beautiful metaphors-lots of depth,
And a great close.
This poem was anything but patchwork.
Keep up the good work!
Rich
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12-11-2005
Brian Dickenson
It sounds as though you are lacking self esteem, but I doubt that you are.
You have described very well, what life and being human is all about.
We are all an amalgam of all the people and the events that we experience as we journey through life, some good, some not so good.
This make us the same, yet so different.
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