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12-22-2005
Richard Reed Jr
Tiffany,
I always love the romantic voice which soothes me in all of your writings.
I agree with David, breaking it into stanzas would improve it immensely.
I think that rhythmically it could flow a bit better, but that's just "nits".
Rich
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11-09-2005
David Pekrul
I think this is very romantic and sweet! It reads well, but I think it would read better if you broke it into four line stazas.
Also, one spelling error, and this is a biggie:
"I surly (the word should be 'surely') cannot hide"
'Surly' means "rude", and surely that is not what you meant.
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11-09-2005
Roger Crique
Falling in love is exciting and breathtaking. But it generally does not make for good poetry. But I like the way you have expressed your feelings and how you're not sure of what it is really that has happened to you. Hey, go for it!
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