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Little Bird Took Flight
by Ernest Lozon (Age: 54)
copyright 12-05-2005

Age Rating: 4 to 127

Curled up in a little ball.
Protected by an oval sphere.
Listening to my mother's call.
Wondering what I'm doing here.

Days and weeks go passing by.
Begin to feel myself insane.
Hoping that I will not die.
Must leave this tight domain.

Furiously kicking, breaking my shell.
Shattering to pieces around me.
Freeing my mind from painful spell.
Sitting straight, in view to see.

Looking around, mother standing proud.
Jumping about, starting to sing.
Hunger sets in, chirping out loud.
Had to eat that slimy string.

Time went by, beginning to train.
Keep on falling to the ground.
Return to nest and try again.
This adventure must be sound.

Very scared and full of fright.
Flapping wings, staring at height.
Pushing away with all my might.
This little bird just took flight.

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01-28-2006 Gregory Christiano

Ernest: you truly have captured the struggle for life so eloquently expressed in your verse. The clarity and emotion of the small creature thrust into this world is poignant. One can actually experience the small bird's fight for life. The poem is well focused with an interesting perception from the bird's point of view... and it can translate into an extended metaphor for a human infant as well. So many parallels can be seen in life itself whether animal or human beings. And you accomplished this without any cliches. Very well done.

12-07-2005 Jean George

Your descriptions and sense of imagery is wonderful...you even capture the emotional intensity with the on-going deliberate rhythm pattern you use...I not only can see this little bird, I become this little bird somewhere between the furious struggle to escape and the awesomely fearsome joy of first flight. I am not sure if I truly enjoy the somewhat staccato beat to the poem, but I may be back with a full five stars as soon as I figure out if that style was accidental or pure genius on your part...Lovely poem, no matter which though.

12-05-2005 David Pekrul

Everyone must leave the nest eventually. At first we just want to get out and on our own, but when the time finally comes, it is rather scary. You have expressed this well; good flow.

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Little Bird Took Flight by Ernest Lozon (Age: 54) copyright 12-05-2005 Age Rating: 4 to 127

Little Bird Took Flight
by Ernest Lozon (Age: 54)
copyright 12-05-2005

Age Rating: 4 to 127