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08-19-2010
Leigh Gilholm Fisher
Unrequited love; as the others have mentioned, it's the kind of thing no one can escape. Your story was very expressive of that, and conveyed how truly damaging it can be.
Great work! I look forward to reading more of your writing!
~Leigh of the Commenting Community
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02-27-2009
June Nazarian
Kimberly, this is a sad tale. To be present, open and loving if the face of an attitude such as his, is not pleasant to say the least. If this is true, it was long enough ago that I assume the situation is long gone. You have skillfully expressed a depth of feeling. One inconsistency I see is the mention of his sensitive eyes in first line, yet the remainder of the poem shows how very insensitive he is. All in all, very nice.....June
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03-05-2008
Eric Gasparich
Aww, who hasn't experienced this. For some, it's not an occurrence, but a way of life.
In this, I see yet again some fudging of transitive and intransitive states, so I have to assume it is part of the way you write. I'm not sure if the effect is to make it more poetic or not, at least in any conventional sense. Of course, I am something of a yokel and a literalist / conventionalist, so I'll have to think further on that.
One thing for sure, you always touch on common human experiences, and that is always solid and trenchant trait to have. As Terentius said, Homo sum: humani nil a me alienum puto- I am human, nothing human is alien to me.
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12-07-2005
David Pekrul
This paints such a sad picture. This is well written, I just hope it is fiction and not from personal experience.
Once small critique:
"But he laughs at me because he doesn't have a handle on it." This sentence should not start with the word 'but'. This sentence should be a continuation of the sentence prior to it.
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