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Just Watch Me
by
Jane L.
(Age: 14)
copyright 12-23-2005
Age Rating: 10 to 127
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Even if everything thats allowed,
Is beyond my ability,
If it's for my dream,
I'll run to the dream.
The dream that awakened me.
The day that everyone acknowledge,
Will come some day.
I won't let anyone run before me!
Don't say that this dream is fruitless.
I'm different than others.
I'll use all my strength to achieve it.
Just watch me.
I'll trust my heart that,
Strongly lives on.
The special people,
That help me run this lonely race.
I now feel the heart to live on.
Even if everything thats allowed,
Is beyond my ability,
If it's for my dream,
I'll run to the dream.
The dream that awakened me.
To the endless challenge,
I'll win and soar.
Until then,
believe me.
I will win.
Just watch me!
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01-19-2008 Samantha P.
Ohh haha one more thing, i totally forgot and slapped myself on the forhead for. I like how you said i will trust my heart, because i cant ever do that otherwise i do regret it, and i love how you mention the important people that are always there to help you, and i love how you put dreams to goals, and you make them possible.
Anyway that about sums it up here
Sammy
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01-19-2008 Samantha P.
I loved how you made WILL in bold lol. This was amazing, my parents would say i relate to this, me stuborn as a rock =D
I didnt see any errors, and your flow was amazing, every phrase kept me going for more and as i finished i almost cried cause i wanted it to keep going -_-
very good yours could win my contest =)
Good luck
Samantha
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05-04-2007 Leigh G.
Great poem, Jane! So very inspirational! My dream will be hard to achieve, but I'm determined to do it and I'll stop at nothing (as long as it's legal and moral...) to get it. Sometimes I wish people would add the legal and moral part, right? :) You worded this nicely, and since I can relate to the meaning it really stands out to me. Personally, I don't find punctuation necessary but I can see why some people think it makes poetry clearer, for it does in many situations. I hope you achieve your dreams, too. :) Great work on this piece, Jane! Keep writing!
Leigh of the Commenting Community
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06-30-2006 Richard Reed Jr
You are truly amazing. I like your sentiments very much and your style of expressing them.
Rich
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12-24-2005 Euna P.
Hey Jane!!!!
This is an awesome poem, and it expresses Naruto's dream very well. I just have one thing to say... PUNCTUATION. I know some people go without punctuation, but I think this could be greatly improved with punctuation.
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12-24-2005 David Pekrul
You sound very positive in this poem and that is good. Never give up your dream, but having said that, always keep in mind that sometimes your dreams aren't fulfilled in exactly the same way that you envisioned. Don't be disappointed. It is your dream that allows you to keep going and be a success in whatever you do.
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12-24-2005 Anthony Lane Stahlhut
Dreams are things we all need to achieve. I wish you success on your journey. Anthony
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12-23-2005 Jane L.
I haven't submitted a poem in such a long time! Anyway, I'm crazy about Naruto and i just wrote a poem about Naruto's dream. But like sometimes, I feel like that too. Everyone says to quit my dream about being a manhwa artist or a singer.
JUST WATCH ME BECOME ONE! lol
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