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 11-29-2007 Tammy Frascona
Every now and again I find a piece like this one that will stop me dead in my tracks after reading it and make me think! A lot of them are yours Richard... I always have to thank you too,I really like the kind of reversal's used to describe how people enjoy and don't enjoy certain things, Great Work!
Your Friend, Tammy F.
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05-13-2006 Regina Pate
Just because one exists does not mean they are alive, and just becase you die does not mean you are dead, and some like their misery cold, and some like their happiness hot, and some hate it in a pot nine days old, Dr. Seuss has gone crazy and Mother Goose is now a grandma three times over, but their will always be a man singing his song, with his best friend rover. I could go on and on, but I won't this is your fantastic, confusing, eye opening, true fairy tale, ok for real I'll quit, but look what you made me do, shut up okay, for real this time, I'm through, great write, good job, thanks,
Regina
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02-23-2006 James Shammas
Another koan from the master! I love it, too, though a little "experimental" and worth reading over; but quite enjoyable, like reading e.e. cummings or Williamm Carlos Williams.
Jim
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02-23-2006 Leigh G.
Very dark...I saw the title, and wondered what could this be about? I've written a few poems containing the curse damn in a title, but they only lived in my note book. Very good work, a few grammar flaws and it's a little, well..not very fluent in the flowing department, but good work. Living to die...so very true. Also, maybe this should be 10+? There's only a few curses, and I have rated a few chapters 7+ using a lot more than one damn, but all the same you get what I mean. I enjoyed reading this and hope to read more darkness soon. Keep up the good work.
May the divine darkness be with you,
Your friend who uses to very clashing closings,
Leigh
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02-23-2006 David Pekrul
Deborah's comments are right on the button. I read this poem again (actually a few times) and slowed it down. I concentrated on every single word as I read it. Then and only then did I realize just how good this really is. I must say you have a great imagination, if not a unique way of looking at life.
I found a new appreciation for this write.
Here are five more points - it's worth every one and more.
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02-23-2006 Deborah Thomas
Well, Tiffany already handed out the award.. and all of the cookies!.. but I still have some kudos left for you!
My reaction.. I had to slow down. I hurried through the first couple of lines, then realized I was missing something! I went through it slowly, questioning it's point at first.. but wanting more..
In the end, I knew the rhythm.. a nursery rhyme for grown-ups!
I do not want to be 'dying living'! I want to die living! Every moment of every day I shall live!.. until I die..
I shall read this one again.
Nothing wrong with the flow.. it is only that you must wrap YOUR head around it.. not make it follow any rules..
I enjoy things that make me stop and think. I would have missed it completely if I had not slowed down.
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02-23-2006 David Pekrul
I sometimes think that life is a contradiction, at least this poems seems to think it is. I didn't find that this flowed all that smoothly, but considering the topic, it's probably better that it doesn't.
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