09-14-2007 Richard Reed Jr
This starts off really great.
How come you never finished it?
Still waiting.........................
Plese read my work "The mist of yesterday".
Rich
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   05-01-2006 Judy Meeker
I like this one much better. It hits home.
God Bless,
Mrs. Tigran Israelyan
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  04-19-2006 Walter Jones
Time marks all things, age is the gift to expand, your voice asks, a word left unanswered, perfection does not come in completion,it comes from the journey, I still wait for your thought
to be completed... Walt
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   04-03-2006 Haley R.
Hey, this is a cool poem! Great start! I've gotta read it when you finish. I think it's powerful, and I'd DEFINATELY read it again when you finish. But who is this "Him"?
Good Job!
The Comment Crusader,
~*|H|A|L|E|Y| |R|*~
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02-13-2006 Richard Reed Jr
Hi Chels,
Waiting for you to continue as are all your other fans. Maybe your too busy thinking of him. If you are so consumed by him, how will you ever be yourself?
Let's get with it girl, haul a........
Rich
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02-03-2006 James Shammas
I'm curious, too. Now don't let us down!
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02-01-2006 Brian Dickenson
As already said, this could be the beginning of an interesting story.
One small query.
Did you mean shattered and broken?
Brian
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02-01-2006 Anthony Lane Stahlhut
My nails are already to the quick. The anticipation will get me, but I am thrilled at what is already here! Anthony
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02-01-2006 David Pekrul
OOh! - Good Start!
Don't stop now, just let it come. There is a good story here; just let your mind wander and don't think too heavily about it, and I know the words will come rushing forth.
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01-31-2006 Roger Crique
This is a very good start to what seems to be an exciting read. Why the 16 age-appropriateness? Just wondering!
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