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02-17-2006
David Pekrul
This is a little gut-wrenching and full of emotion.
"There's a million just like me
Doing the same thing" This line I don't agree with. It is written well, but the truth is, nobody is just like you. You are an individual, totally different from everyone around you. You will one day find your place and others will appreciate you for who you are.
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02-15-2006
Haley Robinson
Wow! It was really good. Dark too, I must say. I liked it a lot. You said that this would make a good song, too, right? Well I agree, it would make a good song. The chourus would be:
"Nobody gives a damn
About one little grain of sand"
Really good. I think the cursing showed your anger and frustration. It was a nice (well, if you'd call curse words nice) little touch to the dark side. But, I must tell you now. PEOPLE DO CARE!
Me, Jordan, Mehrina, EVERYONE does. And don't worry about the people who don't. It's THEIR problem, not yours. Either way, the analogies and comprisons with life to a grain of sand were GREAT!
Keep Up The Good Work!!
~haley
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02-15-2006
Mehrina Butt
*sniff* The cold heartless world we live in. Most people don't even care to actually help out people in need. IN NEED! And those who just want company and support are left by themselves. You're right, it is nothing but a selfish world. I like this poem in the sense that it attacks these type of people and makes them open their eyes to actually see around them. Good job!
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