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05-04-2006
Regina Pate
I am the butterfly that lays here dying, and suddenly I am also crying, for all the butterflies, who lost their wings, but we are changing history, you and me, but I am also the Cherokee that gave up his land, but I forgive you because I too am the White man that helped devise the plan, can't you see, humanity, Open our eyes the child cries, I am the wayward daughter, I am the pridical son, I am royalty, I am everyone, we the people of the United States, Freedom, I name my daughter freedom, oh just read my book, please my freind, when you have the time and then you might find the reason to my rhyme. I still like your style, I might stick around for a while, Great write, good job, thanks,
Regina Gail Pate
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03-13-2006
Tiffany Forster
-hands him a trophy and a big medal-
Brilliant, this piece is so emotional and so...envoking of the question 'who has won'. This has always plauged me, I never really thought the 'pale rider' was all that justified in the actions....but I suppose, well... -sigh-
-hands him a silver and violet cape and a basket of ribbons-
I can;t even get into this, I argue with myself... Great poem though!
Tiffany
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02-16-2006
Deborah Thomas
I am inspired by this piece to search my own soul. To reach out to my ancestors and ask this same question.. 'who has won the day?'
I have grandparents, and great grandparents, that come from both sides of this story..
I am not even a half breed.. but I long for the spiritual dances I have witnessed at pow wow. I could find my answers in the darkness, through the trees, beyond the lights of the fair grounds. But I did not even stay til the end, so I'll never know.
(I am from one of those 'Wannabe' tribes!) ha ha.
OK, back to the 21st century!
Very good, Richard! I'll have to read more.. maybe even write.. you have inspired me. Debbie
Oh, and if you had intended all lines to be capitalized, the 9th verse, 'mixing' needs a capital M. But it's really hard to criticize such a piece, but I'm told that's what this site is for.. to hone our skills and let others proof read our works. I enjoy reading and getting 'emotionally involved'.. not so many do that for me.. thanks again, Debbie
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