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Why me?!
by
Alma H.
(Age: 15)
copyright 02-19-2006
Age Rating: 7 to 127
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Why do you choose me,
even if I flee.
I'm not what think,
though you're on the brink.
Leave, flee, away from me,
I'm not really what you see.
Thing I do are not what I am,
my whole life is a dam.
You intended on finding someone perfect,
I'm not that, do I look it?
You are just not what I like,
if you can't understand, I'm not your type.
Why are you still bugging,
it's not like we're hugging.
If it's someone like me you want,
I'm not going to flaunt.
You are always in my business,
and stop your bizarreness.
It gets old after a while,
you're cramping my style.
You intended on finding someone perfect,
I'm not that, do I look it?
You are just not what I like,
if you can't understand, I'm not your type.
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09-26-2006 Tammy Frascona
All I have to say has been said so I'll just say that I loved it beautifully and you have talent now you have to perfect it.
Tammy F.
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08-08-2006 Haley R.
Nice Poem! I like the part where it says:
"You intended on finding someone perfect,
I'm not that, do I look it?
You are just not what I like,
if you can't understand, I'm not your type."
It's got a cool rhyme scheme, and beat! I also like how you repeat it at the end.
I also like the rhyme:
"It gets old after a while,
you're cramping my style. "
I also see how during the poem in the beginning your kind of like:
"Get away from me, because I'm not right for you"
Then toward the end your more:
"I don't need you and you're not right for me"
The only thing I could suggest is going through it and looking through the rhymes because I think some sound a little forced and kind of confuse me.
Good Job!
~haley of the commenting crusaders
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07-19-2006 Kimberly Murphy
Harsh!! haha Joking. Awesome write!! Keep it up..straight to the point. WOW!! Awesome!!
Kim
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05-11-2006 D.j. F.
i liked it alot and i can kinda realate to that but it was why did u pick me out of every one els but n e ways i think it was good poem have 3 stars and u might want to fix the part yo flaunt.
in to to flaunt well ttyl
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02-20-2006 Jenna T.
I like it. You got to the point and your choice of words was great. Keep it up!
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02-19-2006 Leigh G.
I like it! I'm a dark person and writer (as you know), but all the same I really liked this. It's a little dark and describes crushes and infatuation's perfectly. And what it feels like to be rejected. Isn't that a nice emotion? I'm usually not much for the rhyming thing, but it's a nice fling for this great bing. ^-^ Yes, I stink at rhyming, and I don't know if "bing" is a word... Well anyhow... Keep up the good and dark work. I enjoyed reading this, and since I'm always looking for dark poems, I'll be sure to recommend this to a few of my friends. ;)
May the divine darkness be with you,
Leigh
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