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This made me feel like I was an invisible spectator in a barnyard at midnight. You have nailed in a few succinct verses the abundance of activity that takes place in the mysterious nocturnal hours...or maybe not so mysterious now after your wonderfully painted little vignettes. Reminds me of one of my all time favorite poems, Silver, by Walter de la Mare....yes, I admit it, I am a closet fan of his...so sue me! This is as good a poem as you've written full of local color and simplicity....You'd like Ted Kooser, too.
Here goes: these are all nits, but we''re supposed to critique so...................
Silhouetted branches
Stark against the sky.
Silent bats on leather wings
Watch for moths go by.
(last line??)
A hedgehog caught in headlights glare
Rolls into a ball,(why a comma instead of a period?)
The wheels skim by, this time he’s safe
But oh, so close a call.
Homeward bound, he’s had a good nights poaching
(I like this but it reads a bit awkward)
I liked your wonderful imagery and it was most entertaining.
You reminded me of the artist you spoke about--painting a picture with your words. This is a wonderful work. Very beautiful. I love the descriptions you use!
The images here are distinct, and I agree it has a good mysterious feeling. A few lines might be fixed to keep it flowing smoother, if that's your preference, particularly the line "Homeward bound, he’s had a good nights poaching." Also, it's spelled "palette".
This one was fun. Good to see you're still keeping your pen busy. Or keyboard, as it were.
Hello Brian: you've painted some really vivid images and set a mysterious mood... From the barn owl to the bats with their 'leather wings,' and from the field mouse to the frog... great stuff! I can visualize the silhouettes and the dark vistas. Enjoyed this very much.
Gregory
Welcome !
