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04-18-2006
Judy Meeker
I suppose this is a good write coming from one so very young. You will improve with time as all things do.
May God bless and keep you.
Mrs. Tigran Israelyan
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04-18-2006
Leigh Gilholm Fisher
Ahhh, as Jennifer said, this is a very strong and meaningful poem. You made it relate to a larger crowd, by not saying that it's a friend, loved one, or lover that is being reached for. You did a very good job with this, and it reminds me of many poems and stories that I've written. You've improved greatly, I can really tell since I've read all of your poems now. I singed out and read the one that was over my age rating. :) That was also a very good one, and I can see why you put it up to 13+. For the twelve year olds that are sheltered from the world, it's better not to be exposed to that... For we that are, we sing out and read. This was a very good poem, and aside from the fix-ups that you could do on the grammar, it's an all-around winner. Good work, and keep writing!
May the divine darkness be with you,
Leigh of the Commenting Crusaders
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04-14-2006
Jennifer Campbell-Kletzli
This is indeed a very strong poem. Your poem has some very deep words in it. Great read!
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