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05-10-2006 Doreen Reynolds
Hi Shannon
This is the bones of a very good story because, as you say, it is true. It needs padding out with more information and detail. Just three little comments
He had all the best features a guy
"what she had done"
"Jenny lay in bed and cried".
Add more detail and I will read it again.
Doreen
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04-24-2006 Richard Reed Jr
Hi Shannon,
In fairness to everyone in my contest, I won't comment on this until the completion of my contest. Thanks for entering.
Rich
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