The Awful Things You Said (A Villanelle)
by
David Pekrul
copyright 04-26-2006
Age Rating: 10 to 127
I said "Good Night" and then I went to bed,
To dream, forgetting what was said in haste,
But still I hear the awful things you said.
You turned me down and said we'd never wed,
And said our love was nothing but a waste,
I said "Good Night" and then I went to bed.
I tried to heal, but in my spirit, bled,
How oft' I tried to sleep and dreams embrace,
But still I hear the awful things you said.
You crushed my soul, then left it there for dead,
You took your love away without a trace,
I said "Good Night" and then I went to bed.
I had a drink and tried to clear my head,
I thought the bottle was my saving grace,
But still I hear the awful things you said.
I listened as you told me things I dread,
That left me with a very bitter taste,
I said "Good Night" and then I went to bed,
But still I hear the awful things you said.
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People might not know it, buts words can hurt so much for than a punch. People say things with out knowign how it's going to effect that person. For example my sister when she was in high school these popular girls told the "loser" to go kill herself... and she did!
So sad, David... VERY sad indeed! And very true. When someone says they don't love you... it's crushing when you love them. And the pain, just doesn't go away. At least a real cut scabs over and scars and stops hurting... not so with a wound such as this. And the echo, in our minds, and in our hearts... much like the repeated verse here... just never seems to go away ... but keeps repeating and repeating. Sigh... You know you touch me with everything you write. Remember that song... "Killing Me Softly"... yeah... you are. :-) THank you.
David,
Your form poetry, especially the triolet and this villanelle show what good poetry you can write. I am really impress with what you done with these two poems. I wish you would write more like this.
How sad... it's terrible when you're not a part of someone's life anymore, and you really love them. But no matter how bad it gets, you can't drown out the problem with alchohol.
I love the villanelle style. It has to be my favorite for of poem when used correctly, which of course you did here! I'll quote my English teacher: "If the villanelle were a man, I would marry it.' lol
-Sammy
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