Paint the Stars Black
by
Debra Rose
(Age: 21)
copyright 06-19-2006
Age Rating: 13 to 127
This is mostly supposed to be spoken word. I wrote this in dedication of Show, and was going to perform it at Good Times, but the show got cancelled. LOL! So I'll prolly perform it at the next one coming up :)
Patronize the articulate
morals, and something
leaking....space, distance
time spent apart,
eyes falling, breathing parting,
I'm screaming but...why?
Shadows grace the landscape
I paint with stars of black
and something
...something blue....
...something new....?
A rose to be remembered
a kiss that is forever
savored
from the lips
of someone born
something true
something pure
and out of reach I
can't reach the top
and I'm fading in the eyes
until something
makes me stop.
It's a clash of new emotions
a potion
a motion
and a view
and I'm ungracefully falling
with lack of speed
into you.
And shadows....
...shadows grace this place
And eyes...
vision goes to waist
this chariot and speed
with which my heart can race
and the different colors on your face
this place
I can't erase
the motion of my mind
and something so sublime
but where is it that I'm going
what's this picture that I'm painting
and waiting for the vision
with precision
to come to view
but I can't make it out
I can't pull it out of you.
And it's fading....
Fading....
Fading into the darkness
painting the stars black
like my mind
and it's not coming back
from the void and this place
and the scars and the taste
and the something...
...something I just can't erase.
Where's the voice?
Where's the cries?
Where's the sentimental lies?
Where's the something
that's the nothing
in this space we occupy?
Where's the joy that we speak
And the tears that you weap
And the something...
That's the nothing
inside of you?
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Great sentiments on expressing one's feelings.
It takes people willing to take risks to open their hearts to others. Obviously you are a risk taker. Keep it up, the world needs more like you.
The title was super and the closing stanza was superb, a real work of art that just flowed so easily from my tongue.
This is a good poem. The title shows great meaning, and so do the words of the poem. It seems that you have great interest in writing poems, for you have done a great job writing this one. I hope that life will take you in its own way and that you have a happy life.
Fantastic title! The title itself speaks volumes. My reading of this tells me of the importance of having and expressing feelings-- of being alive, however it may feel, however unpleasant or extreme. Great use of form to match with content, too.
the beginning seems to be an intricate collage of stark, intriguing images, brought together by a similar thread of undertoned passion, while the ending becomes a cosmic narration spoken by a single mote of a person.
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