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 09-24-2006 Mary -BrytEyz- Ball
This was a nice "trip down memory" lane. Unfortunately, my first memories (and all scents and sounds) are so far behind me that they seem not so vivid in my imagination (nor in my own "black sweatshirt"). Thus, works like this bring it all alive once again and I cherish every opportunity to do so. Tank you for sharing this wonderful bitter-sweet work with us.
- BryEyz
Of the Commenting Crusaders
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07-25-2006 Richard Reed Jr
Hi Sam,
This was most touching and descriptive-well-crafted and economically written. Great choice of words. It was my honor to read it.
Thank you for entering my contest and please read my moon note.
Rich
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07-08-2006 Mehrina B.
Wow, wow, oh wow Samantha! So beautiful, so sweet, so lovely! This is one of the best ones I've ever read in all my life! Every word was so preciously used, and such wonderful words, and the entire poem was just toooooooo beautiful! Bravado, you lovebird! Sparkles on your Sparkly mind! ;)
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07-06-2006 BJ Niktabe
This makes me want to go out and buy a plain black hoodie and have it silk-screened on the front (in white font, of course) to say, "meaningless drivel." I would buy one that says that, but I don't think I've ever seen one like that.
I like this. But I don't read sad in it. I see butterflies in the stomach at that first touch. And I happiness as you run through the rain, but it seems like that happiness is almost ecstasy.
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06-28-2006 Tabitha Beaudin
Wow, that was long but very good. I really like how you formatted it, and like David said, it is full of emotion, but mostly it was lots of fun to read!
Tabby.
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06-28-2006 Leigh G.
Very nice Sami! I really liked this one, like David said, the choice of words is a great one! The flow and style of the poem keep it moving, and keep the readers' interest. You told a story here, in what I call the "Short Line" style...I've adopted the Long Line style myself, since it tells a story in a prose form. You've managed to tell a sad and very true story here, in a poem style which is impressive. Something that bothers me: There's only one tiny little comment! You know me and how I get with short comments...it's sickening! Before I get too distracted...this was a very good poem! Like I said, the flow and all of that are good, not to mention the descriptions you have here. The title is also a fitting one pending on the topic... Great work, keep writing!
Leigh of the Commenting Crusaders!
P.S. I read the rest SOS. :)
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06-28-2006 David Pekrul
Very, very nice. So full of emotion with well-chosen words. Looks like I have some stiff competition in this contest.
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