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 05-07-2007 Leigh G.
Hmm, it seems "Ah" and a bunch of ~'s is becoming your trade mark. ;) We all smile when we feel like crying at some point in our lives, I believe. It's something natural, with pain comes the strength that stops us from being selfish and letting other people worry. It's a sign of stubbornness, but we all have a little of that somewhere too. You have some deep phrases in this poem, good thought-invokers. Another poem worthy of victory in a contest. :) I didn't find any spelling or grammar errors, although I'm not much of an editor. I can't complain about capitals or punctuation, though. :) Great work, Jane! Keep it coming!
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11-14-2006 Debra Rose
I've often felt this way, especially lately. Hiding behind the jokers grin, unable to wipe it off my face despite the fact that I feel like I'm dying inside. Unable to refrain from saying those cursed words "I'm okay, don't worry about it", because I can't push past my own pride to tell the truth.
This was a beautiful work
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09-10-2006 Alysyn Bourque
The beautiful thing about a song is that the words are only a part of the emotion relayed to the listener. I would love to hear the music in your mind which accompanied this. I can imagine that there is much that is missing in the interpretation without it.
I hope that your heart never stops singing, but that sadness will find a way to become joy, and that in more abundance. You are not alone, sweetheart, and this world is full of people who appreciate the words and music you share with them.
Thank you.
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07-10-2006 Tammy Frascona
Keep singing but change the tune to a happy one and then you shalt not cry any more. I loved the first two lines the best when you say you are looking up into the sky so the tears will not fall any more, truely poetic. I have been where you are in this piece and I struggle every day with it and it saddens me that others have to also! I apoligize all the time for acceptance and I've learned that it hardly gets you any where. Instead of working like we think it should it back fires and gives the other person the upper hand to walk all over us because we have made it clear that we take the blame even for their actions and faults.It's time that we stop and stand up for how and why we feel the way we do and take control over our selves again.... What do you think? I loved the poem
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