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The Seashell
by Robert Joseph Hughes
copyright 10-17-2006


Age Rating: 13 to 127

 
When down upon the seashore
While walking with the wind
A sparkling, shining seashell
Shown half atop the sand

Reaching down to touch it
A voice came from the sea
I turned to gaze amazed
When again it spoke to me

“Please leave the seashell sparkle
With the sun and moon afar
Its time has come to shine
And be just what we are

So please my dear man help us
To keep the sea with he
To lie upon the ocean shore
And be eternally

Oh keep the seashell in the sand
And pass the seashell by
Then you’ll find our seashells
Shall never turn to cry”

Violence then grew with the sea
Breaking waves upon the sand
To save the sparkling seashell
From the hand of man

I blinked and scratched and thought awhile
And looked upon the sea
And ask myself how I would feel
If the seashell had been me

So as the sun began to fall
I strolled along the shore
I watched the seagulls fly the sky
And dive the ocean floor

Then as the sea rolled in its waves
And broke upon the shore
I’d pass a sparkling seashell
And leave it there for sure


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10-25-2006 Roger Crique    

The first few stanzas are beautiful and very fluid. But you are caught in rhyme and free-verse. I would also try to limit the use of words such as "then," and "and." In the third stanza, the voice commands the author to leave the seashell as is, but then it also refers to itself as part of the seashell. I would leave the voice stand on its own as a separate entity. Let the voice be the voice of reason and not the voice of another seashell. And lastly, the length of the poem is a bit long. The message can be told in fewer stanzas, keeping the fluidity crisp and the imagery more memorable. It is a great effort, but it needs a little more work.
10-23-2006 Gregory Christiano    

What an interesting and unique topic. I would have given this a five rating just for originality alone, but what struck me was the line: "While walking with the wind," was excellent imagery, almost a simile. That clinched it. The verse was creative and well presented.
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