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Where Now My Heart May Lie...
by
Alysyn Ayrica Bourque
(Age: 44)
copyright 09-01-2006
Age Rating: 7 +
No matter future's fickle farce,
Ne'er time, the tides we spirits ride,
Shall ever draw my love from thee
Ev'n if our eyes embrace be scarce.
All words beset by heady price,
(Can linger long in hearts set firm
O'er ample years, but for the fall,)
May wither by their own device.
I give, upon thy supple glance,
Such things as I am loathe to part;
Yet fearlessly I stumble toward
This door which tenders Eden's chance.
In shallow trance of thee I dream;
Through spirit's kiss I breathe thy breath
And know that days shall pass in pairs -
A callous amaranthine stream...
In open ways test I to speak,
But thee, in secrecy, I keep.
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02-27-2007
Leigh Gilholm Fisher
Wow, this is impressive! I was scanning Silver Authors, and for some reason whenever I see a five star author I'm determined to read his or her works and pass judgment on whether he or she is truly a five star author...yup, another words I don't believe in perfection and I'm a pain-in-the-behind. Anyway, I quite liked this piece! Your choice of words and flow were quite impressive, perhaps that's a up point of reading the works of adult authors...but, as a Commenting Crusader I make it a point to comment on younger authors too because if they don't develop, than when they are adults they won't have learned how to write good poetry. Anyway, this is an impressive piece and worth all five stars. Did you notice I'm the only minor that has commented though? Don't any monitors read the works of adults nowadays on PnP? Good work, keep writing!
Leigh of the Commenting Crusaders
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09-16-2006
Walter Jones
I have read your work before, not sure what site; however, this is a touch of class, special relationship in sound and verse, easily lost in the words and image. Walt
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09-13-2006
Deborah Thomas
I love it! I am really fond of the use of the word 'fickle':)
Your rhythm and tone placed me in another time.. another place. I am sure this was the intention of your effort!
As you challenged my'Poe's Pen', (and you were correct! why didn't anybody else catch that?) I must ask if your first stanza, third line, should not be "Shall e'er draw my love from thee"? I see that it may be trade-off for rhythm?? Hmmm..
Well done at any rate! Let's have more!!! Debbie
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09-12-2006
Tammy Frascona
Very in-tuned with yourself and your expression. I am in wonder of how someone could feel such things and be able express them the way you have just done! I am at a loss for words so I'll say Great Job and would love to read more from you! I like your style.!
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