Silent Tears
by
Shannon W.
(Age: 17)
copyright 10-16-2006
Age Rating: 10 to 127
Tears fall from my face, like rain
from the sky.
My desperate sorrows no one can here.
I sit alone in my room and
Cry my silent
Tears.
No one likes me, no one cares,
no one would notice if I died and left this
of a world behind.
Everyday I cry my silent tears. I
Cry in silence for fear
That some one will here.
No one notices how low I look, no one
Realizes how much pain I’m in, no one truly
Understands.
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I think in a lot of your poetry you always say no one. Like no one cares or no one is my friend. Well you do have friends I know bye all the comments with people telling you they are here for you. Not all poetry is supposed to be happy but yours shows a lot of depression. I'm sorry for the bad things you have suffered. I'm always here for you. Don't forget that!
Great Poem. Yes we all have much pain, but the pain that everyone feels is different from each other. I have been there MANY MANY times. Fighting.(its a phrase we use in korea)
If these are your real feelings then you should know, as I'm sure you've been told a thousand times in your reviews, there are people who care, if you need to talk anyone here at PnP is willing to listen, most more than happy too. It isn't easy to deal with feelings like these by yourself, in fact it shouldn't even be an option! But I love your poem, the title just grabs the reader and makes them want to hear your poem. Good job!
First, I love the name of this poem. It's a name that catches the eye, and sets the readers emotions before they even start on the poem.
Second, the sadness, loneliness, and cries that come through to the reader are unmistakable.
Third, if this truly is a 'cry for help,' please know that many of us, and I mean VERY many have felt these emotions at one time or another, and any of us here at PnP are here for you should you need us.
Fourth, this piece would earn 5 points easy, if you were to go back and do the edits pointed out in previous comments.
I will try to leave my maternal instincts out of this, which make me want to -squeeeeze- ya, and brush your hair back out of your soggy eyes!
That said, I will be the one to tell you where your spell check won't work... 'here' is still a correctly spelled word, but if you mean to hear with your ears, then you have the wrong 'here/hear'... get it? I am sure you do, and you are checking to see if anybody is really listening??? Anyway, you 'hear' with your 'ears'.
I am on my way to read your book.
Once again, you have put feelings to paper in such a way to 'lure' your audience into the piece.
I think I will make a challenge for a happy piece, especially for you 'dark' poets. I want to see a rainbow for all of this rain! I think I will try posting my first 'moon note' with my challenge. See ya! Debbie
I agree with Euna I too am hearing HELP PLEASE! Crying can help relieve pain at the toughest of times! I luv this poem and it is full of emotion! Keep up the good work
Tasha
Welcome !
