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Addiction
by
Erin Godwin
(Age: 19)
copyright 10-03-2006
Age Rating: 13 +
One mistake upon fate deceased,
A solution in which your mind had feast,
Teetering upon the edge of addiction,
A graceful bow upon conviction.
Will you rise? Or will you fall,
Leaning up on the broken wall.
You only slip with every thought,
A pain brought forth, that you have wraught.
Is this right? Or is this wrong?
Correct once thought was wrong too long.
Stubborn habit, will bring you into evil,
Your solution need not be the needle.
One mistake upon fate deceased,
A solution in which your mind had feast,
Teetering upon the edge of addiction,
A graceful bow upon conviction.
If you sacrifice along the way,
You will live to see another day.
If you shrink back to selfish increase,
Your mistake upon fate deceased.
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I think this may speak for itself, I don't know. Tell me what you think?
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11-28-2006
Euna Park
Okay Erin, this is really freaky. I've been reading all your works, and you NEED to write a happy poem. Please? Email me when you do.
This poem is really well written though. It is really touching, beautiful, and astoundingly amazing. Your feelings shine through so clearly that I think even I can feel a shadow of them, which is really saying something. I love the way you can rhyme things, and it's really cool how you can do verse. Your subject matter is what annoys me cause you seem to have written nothing but depressing stuff, but your writing style is really... well, awesome. You don't really seem this depressed at school, so I won't worry too much about it. Gimme an email, kay, so I won't get seriously worried.
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11-18-2006
Debra Rose
I can't believe I didn't find this sooner.
THis is...so unbelievably beautiful. Touching and amazing and astonishing. Having experienced the horrors of addiction first hand, I read this and am left, mouth hanging open, in shock.
The questioning, the realization that you need to break away...the fear...you've captured and portrayed it, as well as the ever present knowledge and whispering voice "if you don't stop, you'll die"
I LOVE THIS work!
Bravo.....
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11-18-2006
Amelia Zada
Wow, you use such interesting words. I didn't really understand it but I love how its sounds, and the style in which you wrote it. Very Good ^^
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