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03-29-2007
Samantha Powers
Wow I totally love this poem! It has been five minutes since I have read it and it is still etched into my mind. I didn't see any errors and I totally wish I was a vampire. If a Djinn where to ever grant me a wish that would be one of them. Anyway my god it makes the hair on my neck stand up when i try and imagine the guy. Wish I had someone to spend the rest of eternity with, or at least until I die.
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!!!!!!!!
Samantha
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01-18-2007
Amanda Carroll
To be honest, I was afraid that at first this would be a rip-off of Atreyu's "A Vampire's Lament," but although the theme is similar, I was thankfully mistaken.
There's a lot of slant rhyme, which, although it is not my favorite thing in the world -is still a legitimate poetuc device. (ie: eyes / arrived)
The rhyme is also unconsistant, but perhaps this is meant to be a song?
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01-13-2007
Chessie Hodge
This is wonderful! I love vampires. You've managed to illustrate perfectly their sense of time and their vulnerability. Great job! Keep writing!
Chessie H.
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01-10-2007
David Pekrul
I always thought of the vampire as being the aggressor and the criminal, but you have made him out to be the victim. This is a good write, looking through the eyes of the vampire.
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