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I dunno what's more astounding... that a piece like this only has two comments and five points, or that a work like this has only 19 reads so far.
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I love your poem so much!! It spoke to me. It's like you're talking to a precious friend or family member. And in RHYME...!! I cannot rhyme to save my life, and I deeply admire anyone who can make such a wonderful poem that speaks so deeply, in RHYME!!! FIVE POINTS AREN'T ENOUGH FOR THIS!!
This piece could probably be interpreted as a dedication to God, or to a parent, or a close friend, or a lover. It's pleasantly universal in its application.
I wonder if you would reconsider a couple lines, though. You might catch the ones I mean, yourself, if you take a bit more time with it; you're experienced enough that I don't have to nitpick anything. I will call special attention to the second verse's rhyme with the word "release". I'm confident that there's a much better way to construct that rhyme.
I am reminded here of where my help comes from... yes I look unto the hills, but I find my peace in reading God's word.
Here, though, I see a lady. Childlike in her manner; full of vibrance, yet quiet in her laughter. Such as you would think a bubbling brook... soothing, distracting.
I understand this, because my own husband needs me the same way... he says 'to chase the ghosts away'.
Lovely rhythm. The words just roll right off the tongue.
This has touched my heart.
Debbie
Welcome !
