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08-28-2007
Marilyn Mackenzie
Very deep indeed. Some poems don't need punctuation. You just seem to know the poet's mind and pause where necessary. Perhaps Catherine is right about this one, though. Punctuation might help. I also might consider whether words like "although" and "yet" really contribute to the entire thought. Thanks for sharing!
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08-17-2007
Catherine Wilson
This is a very deep feeling piece and I found it very enjoyable to read. The only thing that I could suggest, though it's just my thoughts of course, is adding punctuation. The only reason I say that is if you show me where your natural pauses are, I'll be able to read it like you intended. Right now I can read it fine and not having punctuations isn't taking away from this piece but adding it would add a nice touch.
Good job with this piece.
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