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Mistakes
by Tina Hicks (Age: 21)
copyright 10-27-2008


Age Rating: 13 to 127

 
She hides the fear as it fills her heart,
With him she dares not to part,
People never see them fight,
Everything seems to be alright,
She'll never be able to say,
What she lives with from day to day,
The beating that she takes,
He said they are mistakes,
She's tired of hearing his lies,
At night she prays that she dies,
She shouldn't have to live her life this way,
If she wants to live? She must stay!
For her life he will take take,
Then say it was a mistake!




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11-10-2008 Frank Fields    

This is a fast-paced profile of an abusive situation which has captured most of the emotions involved. A good many of them anyway. I can add little to what has already been said, but I can ask a question. The third line from the bottom, questioning if she wants to live. Then answering it by an unresolvable direction of having to stay in an abusive situation. Why does she have to stay to live? There are many options for anyone in that position. The courage and resolve to actually move oneself out of that environment might be difficult. But if death is a foregone conclusion, it seems contradictory to make such a statement. All of which takes nothing away from the sadness and despair your writing reflect. If this is writing about actual events, my heart-felt sympathies go out to the person and the hopes that she will find a way to not be trapped.

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11-07-2008 Anthony Lane Stahlhut    

Control is the thing here. He has it over her and that will not change. Does he love her...proudly, but the need to control is stronger. I lived this at home and my wife now lived it with her first husband. I got to see it when we first met because he stalked her for over a year after we had started dating. As hard as it is going to be..SHE NEEDS TO GET OUT! the abuse won't stop and he could hurt her very badly even if she doesn't leave. Get help and set up the exit strategy, but she needs to get out! Good luck to her and you! Anthony
10-29-2008 Susan Brown    

Bone chilling the emotions ensnared with-in these lines. A rhyming outcry, a murmur in the view- felt. Scary this drama- reads.
The largest mistake would arrive in the staying. Especially when children are prevalent, in this type of visual nightmare. Good planning... makes the path, accessible.
For those that see themselves hiding among dysfunctional darkness (male or female)...run... into the light. Time is precious. Never give in- to blatant manipulation.
Susan
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