Too Too Gentle...
by
Robert Betts
(Age: 62)
copyright 10-20-2001
Age Rating: 13 to 127
'twas a sunset,
a sunset to remember,
brilliant orange, red
all glorious hues.
fit for september
but night follows sunset,
cold, dark and still.
I cry alone,
wanting to be,
begging to be,
someone I can't.
I just cannot be
My God and my friend,
please forgive me,
but I just cannot be
who I'd like to be.
I've hurt you terribly
You're crying too.
I know in my heart,
I know it is true,
but don't let me change you,
jade you, derange you,
you're just a lamb,
too trusting of wolves.
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This is a mighty poem, Bob. I'm impressed with the drastic, but still organic shifts in tone it undergoes. From nature's beauty to fear of night and loneliness and self criticism, suplicant before God, to appologetic and timid, afraid of having hurt "you". Is it still God you're talking to? I'm not sure, but that doesn't bother me. Impressive.
I would also like to echo the comment around how you went from a peaceful beautiful image of nature to the darkness twisting tourtured soul. Well done.
Lots of emotion in this, Bob. You know, I think we spend a lifetime trying to be what we think we ought to be; what we thik others want us to be; trying to interpret what God wants us to be (if that's your conviction). but it's a good thing to understand when you need to just... BE.
Very nicely said, Bob. I think many of us see ourselves as unfit to be with someone. If only we could see ourselves as the rest of the world sees us. . . . Jackie
We fall for what we expect someone to be, and are disappointed to find out who they are...
nicely said, Bob, somehow I think you are nicer than you think...
Geez Bob! I love this I really do, I know in my heart that I know what you mean with this but my words at the moment just seem to be dissaranged.
I will return with a fitting comment, this has me thinking about the way some people see themselves and know deep down in their heart that they should be something else, but have to be who they are. Hey! Perhaps this comment is appropiate?
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