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06-18-2007
Wayne Thomas
Good song. I liked the use of questions and answers as a structure. Imaginary light--Mehrina said it all. You're a fascinating writer and though I might not get a specific comment for a particular work, know that I enjoyed it. Thanks for a good mind trip!
Wayne
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03-29-2007
Mehrina Butt
A phenomenal piece!
I didn't feel as though that this piece revolved mainly on the elements and how well it was written, but more on the words themselves. And there is no doubt that this was very well-written indeed!
Some of the phrases you used in this were simply amazing! "Tell me why you chose this road that doesn't lead to dawn"; "It's not safe inside our minds"; "The mind... can be a sanctuary, or... our demise"; "Go ahead, destroy the sanctuary, and let all the tears we weep add to your shadow". *Amazing*!
I especially liked the parts about imaginary light. I never thought of shadows that way, as imaginary light. But now that you bring it up, I realize it's completely true. Shadows are nothing but imaginary light; places where the light is trying to fall and cannot get through. A mere imitation of light. I suppose that's reason enough to be afraid of our shadows then, huh?
Great write, Leigh!
Your BFFE~
~*Meh*~
Of the CC
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